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Songbird
Member Elite

since 1999-12-15

Posts 2184
Missouri

0 posted 2000-05-20 08:25 PM

If there were no words
My mind knew
Thoughts were only pictures
Of the things my eyes had seen
You would be the matching picture
For the sunrise

If I had no eyes to see
Had no pictures to match
Yet ears to hear
Your equivalent might be
The singing of birds
In the trees
Along a rippling brook

If I had no seeing eyes
Nor hearing ears
Only advantage
Touch
Your comparison
Would
Be even greater
More overwhelming
Than a drink of cold water
In the desert heat
Or a morsel of food
At the edge of starvation

With no words, no eyes, no ears
Your touch
Just possibly might
Be comparable
To life fulfilled and renewed
By a bountiful supply
Of oxygen

With you
When all else fails
I breath
Inhaling
Your love

No other
Sensory or communication
Systems
Needed

ellie LeJeune
Member Elite

since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

1 posted 2000-05-20 08:40 PM

Oh, how beautiful is this poem of a lover to the beloved. Rose, This is so romantic, I love it. I had to read it a couple of times. the way it flowed, lovely. "I breathe inhaling your love". wow...Ellie< !signature-->

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whipsnade
Junior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 40

2 posted 2000-05-20 10:45 PM

Septsong
  This jaded old trouper doesn't normally respond to "romance",,  but this has  an elegant, simple sweetness that is very real.
       beautiful job
                   Ricardo

Alle'cram
Senior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 1816
Texas

3 posted 2000-05-21 02:21 AM

Septsong,
You have captured love with heavenly poetry. Your talents shining brightly with this one. Could be used with spiritual meaning or personal, just beautiful. marcy

Songbird
Member Elite

since 1999-12-15

Posts 2184
Missouri

4 posted 2000-05-21 03:41 PM

I have often wondered what our thought system would be like without ability of words, thought it must be like as I tried to describe here, memories of what I eyes had seen. Allicram you are right this could be applied to both human personal level and spiritual level also, as I wrote it I thought of my husband, but then as I read it I thought how well it applied in a spiritual sense to the our love relationship with God, much like the Song of Soloman's message can be taken. I am moved by all of your comments.

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

5 posted 2000-05-21 10:42 PM

Septsong this was so unique in it's thinking. The spiritual side of it anyhow.
You really are making me stop and think what it would be like. hmmn, what pleasant thoughts it brings around. Thank you!

deleeme
Senior Member

since 1999-10-09

Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA

6 posted 2000-05-22 09:20 PM

Thank God for the gift of words so we can express our appreciation for such a marvolusly written poem with such depth of meaning. How often do we include that as we recount our blessings before Him?
Very good indeed, David

"GOD GIVES- but man must open his hand." (German Proverb)

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