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Jer
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0 posted 2000-01-17 11:22 PM


Have you ever felt like,
Someone was walking with you?
Almost as close as your shadow,
Yet it wasn’t.

Have you ever felt like,
Someone was talking to you?
Almost like your closest friend,
Yet it wasn’t.

That one someone,
That’s always there.
Always watching.
Neverless, who could it be?
Why it’s God I say.

God is always walking with you,
Closer then your own shadow.
God is always talking to you,
In words, thoughts, and propositions
You never thought of before.

Keep this in mind,
When you need a friend.
Because God,
Is the closest one you’ll find.



 *~* Come work for the Lord. The work is hard, the hours are long and the pay is low. But the retirement benefits are out of this world. *~*

© Copyright 2000 Jeremy Snyder - All Rights Reserved
Majestic
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since 2000-01-11
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houston, tx.
1 posted 2000-01-17 11:28 PM


how about a "A Friend Revealed"...Good thought provoking read there Jer....
WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
2 posted 2000-01-18 12:06 PM


Jer this was superb!  I think Walking with God, for a title maybe?  And He is our closest friend, and Father, He is our family!
Great thoughts, great reminder!
God bless you, I know he has, I just thank you for sharing that blessing with us!

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

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LoveBug
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3 posted 2000-01-18 12:09 PM


Hey, Jer! Great work, as always... Yes, God is our closest friend!

 "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world"

Michael
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4 posted 2000-01-18 12:13 PM


Yes, Jer, I have felt Him standing next to me too.  And it's wondrous when someone realizes they are hearing God speak to them as well.  He is always right there, always right with you.  Great poem.  

For a title, I think maybe "Always There" or "Always With You" might serve as well.


Michael

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
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5 posted 2000-01-18 12:38 PM


That was great! I know God is there for me and feel his nearness too. A good title might be "NEVER WALK ALONE".

 02

Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
6 posted 2000-01-18 07:29 PM


Beautiful Jer.  Title?  *shrugs*  I dunno, minds pretty blank right now!


 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~



deleeme
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since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA
7 posted 2000-01-18 10:21 PM


Good Poem Jer--for a poem title, how about,
"THE BEST FRIEND I NEVER SAW"  ?

Jer
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since 1999-12-02
Posts 443
USA
8 posted 2000-01-18 11:18 PM


WOW... so many suggestions on the title.....  I am gonna have to think about this hard because I love them all.  Thank you all for the suggestion and for taking the time to read my work.

 *~* Come work for the Lord. The work is hard, the hours are long and the pay is low. But the retirement benefits are out of this world. *~*

Denise
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9 posted 2000-01-18 11:45 PM


Great poem, Jer! Good luck with picking a title from all these great suggestions!
sandgrain
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since 1999-09-21
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Sycamore, IL, USA
10 posted 2000-01-23 03:16 PM


Loved the poem, Jer.  Immediately thought of "Oneness" or "In His Image" as good titles, but then  your writing really suggests so many things....comfort, under- standing, security, encouragement, helpfulness, etc. we find as we walk with our Lord.
Geo
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since 1999-12-29
Posts 73
Nebraska
11 posted 2000-01-23 11:41 PM


Great Jer,
How about "My Soul Shadow"?

cloverT
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since 2000-01-20
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12 posted 2000-01-29 05:33 PM


"The Great Always"

"Always"

"Always in All ways"

 

dovesongs
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 102
Michigan
13 posted 2000-01-31 12:43 PM


Great poem Jer.  I am so glad God is your best friend as he is mine.  

 

Willem
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since 1999-11-18
Posts 139
Inverness, FL, USA
14 posted 2000-01-31 10:30 PM


I really like this poem, Jeremy. The message is beautiful in its simplicity, devoutly direct approach and convincing spirit.
You could maybe pay a little more attention to the rhythm.  Keep writing!

Willem

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