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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
Ok, before you read further, let me state something. This was written by me when I was twelve years old. At the time, I was new to writing poetry. I was thinking about the cover of Stephen King's novel Dolores Calaborne (sp?) with the eclipse overhead when I wrote this. It's about the lady who pushed her husband down a well. But I put myself in his place. Oh well. Don't blame me for what I did 7 years ago. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "No Escape, No Return" So stuck am I here, I am trapped here and my leg there, So struck am I by their cruelty, Why did they ever push me into this well? I am tied up, and I'm gonna die! I look up, shadows roam above, Faces look at me and laugh, the cruelest whisper of words I ever heard, Oh! Just over them is a view of a solar eclipse, I am dying here. . . I cry out for help, They glare at me and throw dirt at me. . . My arm is broken and I suffer head injury, The betrayers leave me, I look for help, Until I die slowly and softly. . . The solar eclipse looks like a evil eye now, it deeply betrayed me, Only to bring death and slowly reap me. Now I must sleep, for I don't want to see the rest of this, My eyes close...close...close. |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
Kinda morbid for a twelve year old...hehe.. It does remind me of Christ hanging on the cross... Thanks for the read... |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
Majestic, thanks very much. I was a loner, it is indeed true, and still am. But I viewed it two different ways: personal experience, and how Jesus must have felt. Two ways to look at it. Thanks. |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
I think friend, that this shows potential and good imagination, even at that relatively young age. It may well stand as a promise or prediction not of death, but of the future of a talented young poet. I take it as a personal testament to you-to encourage you to go on and further develop this ability which you have been granted. God Bless you, David "Our Creativity points to a Higher Creator--we couldn't have just happened, and for what ability we may possess--to God be the glory." -dlw- |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
For 12 yrs old this isn't bad at all. And yes, it does have a double meaning. That is good in poetry to let one's mind interpret. I can see Christ in this also, the death of him on the cross too.  <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
David- You are encouraging me to write more. That makes me feel good. Thank you! I love hearing what you are able to derive from my poems. Rebecca- I thought this would be interesting to show you. As an amateur, I was already writing with several hidden meanings. I can see Jesus in it too... it kind of captures the feeling I would guess he had when he was hated by the world. There is another hidden meaning. The eyes close...close...close. A solar eclipse does that too. Or did you already dig that one out? [This message has been edited by Artur Hawkwing (edited 01-16-2000).] |
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blueyz75 Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138IL |
You guys wouldn't want to see what I wrote when I was 12 years old! I was in "love" and I just knew there would never be anyone else for me. Typical girl stuff, but still to this day I can go back and reread my old stuff and tell you exactly who I was referring to. Guess in a way you always remember love!Oh and hey, you get points for creativity by using Delores Claiborne as inspiration, hehe ~. Also, how old are you now?Kelly I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
Gotcha - crazy of me to use Delores Claiborne as inspiration, isn't it...*sigh*.... I am 19....oh, and anyways, I beg you to show me your 12 years old poem!! My curiosity is at stake here! Just kidding!  |
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