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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2001-11-10 08:03 PM


Morning shine gives touch to the grass;
Caring hands give joy to the world.
Though fogs cloud the view of the hills,
The valley of innocent can be clearly seen.
Though four wheels trucks sadden the air,
The smiles of the flowers brightens the day.

//a caring hand, a smile save someone day. it doesn't need to be Christian to do good work. So what do you think about the poem? What title should I use?

Love,
Lizzy Vivian
http://members.shaw.ca/home0/

~I'm a person of two faces, Who is neither extraordinary nor plain. I'm not the most outspoken

© Copyright 2001 Eliza Simmons - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-11-10 10:33 PM


Caring Hands is what sticks in my mind! Good job on this.

Betty Lou Hebert

aries_luv_ppl
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2 posted 2001-11-10 10:40 PM


Would the first line of the verse make a good title?

Love,
Lizzy Vivian
http://members.shaw.ca/home0/

~I'm a person of two faces, Who is neither extraordinary nor plain. I'm not the most outspoken

Songbird
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3 posted 2001-11-11 12:18 PM


I like to give title's that are kind of short and tend to sum up what the poem is about, although not entirely, as I want people to be curious enough about the title to want to read it. How would "Morning's Touch" sound to you on this? Just a thought.. I think naming poems is one of the things I most enjoy doing about writing poetry, although I cannot tell you why, it's just my thing.. I like to name kittens and puppies.. When you name poetry you've written I guess it is sort of the same feeling, you are summing up a personality of the poem providing a hint of a description of what it is all about.  
aries_luv_ppl
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4 posted 2001-11-11 04:49 PM


Thanks Songbird. I will use that title.

Love,
Lizzy Vivian
http://members.shaw.ca/home0/

~I'm a person of two faces, Who is neither extraordinary nor plain. I'm not the most outspoken

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