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K. Rebel
Junior Member

since 2001-10-21

Posts 40
San Juan, PR

0 posted 2001-11-07 07:25 PM

I see the sun of dusk,
Look at it and it blinds me,
It enters my soul like a bullet
And awakens me.
Opens my eyes firmly
And enters into my heart,
It runs threw my veins
With a beautiful heat,
A volatile heat,
A heat of pleasure,
A heat I do not know.
I enter a glorious world,
I see what I want
And I want what I see.
I loose my mind
In this beautiful world of pleasure.
I forget that thundering bullet
That divides my soul,
I forget that incredible love,
That blinds me to frequent.
I forget that abyss,
In which I fall all the time.
I forget that battle
I lose day by day,
Trying to move my boneless body.
I think in nothing that will lose me,
I think in me,
And I lose my conscience.
I turn around,
I see a woman,
Precious and indescribable,
That revolves my mind,
That changes my thoughts,
That makes me think
In the dawn of a new day,
That soon will be here,
And will brighten my being.
I feel entertained for a moment,
And I return to my boring duties.
And I will soon see,
I only dream,
With a liberty
I will soon arrive.

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

1 posted 2001-11-07 09:42 PM

This is the makings of a good poem.
As I read this I could interpret it in more than way.

It gave me thought of how tough and distracting this world can be, as well as how beautiful Heaven or God can be.

I'm sure there are many more interpretations as well.

I enjoyed this one!

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Life may have influenced who we R, but we're responsible for what we become.
I don't question YOUR existance- GOD

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

2 posted 2001-11-08 02:26 PM

I interpreted this the same as WHTDove. It's like, this world is a hard,terrible place to live, but if you have faith and stick with it, the rewards are endless. I like that.
Jon

"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur
"Sometimes it takes a painful loss to realize you are free"- Bouncing Souls

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2001-11-10 10:19 PM

Dear K Rebel, Yes there is poetry here, but I am not sure if I can interpret your meaning correctly. I thought you might be incarcerated and are biding your time with dreams. Or maybe just bored and lonely and dreaming. Nevertheless it was interesting. Joyce

K. Rebel
Junior Member

since 2001-10-21

Posts 40
San Juan, PR

4 posted 2001-11-11 11:53 PM

In this poem I am very well dreaming and lost, this poem is all about trying to find how to get to my true self without messing up my life and just finding my true meaning in this life

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