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neweyeday
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since 2001-07-12
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0 posted 2001-07-12 09:57 AM


today
you are the sky
and I am a small tree
with arm branches lifted

you smile
with a sun color mouth
my leaves tremble in your presence
my roots lift me closer to you

from my limbs
bird voices sing their praise
you strum their wings
with gentle winds

I look at you in quiet
you recognize my eyes
among millions in your forest
you find my adoration

© 2001


© Copyright 2001 neweyeday - All Rights Reserved
Joyce Johnson
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1 posted 2001-07-12 11:13 AM


How very nice this is.  How close to God ae trees.   Joyce
neweyeday
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2 posted 2001-07-12 11:24 AM


Thank You Joyce..sorry for not introducing myself to the group prior to posting...it didn't occur to me to do so until after.
Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725
California
3 posted 2001-07-12 04:26 PM




W E L C O M E !

Let everything that has breath praise the Lord!!!  Your poem gives me a feeling of being one with nature and all the rest of God's marvelous creation.  I do believe as you have penned, even the trees praise the Lord with their branches lifted high unto Him.  Beautiful.   Bob <><

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4 posted 2001-07-12 05:48 PM


Welcome to the site and enjoyed your poem very much! Will look for more of your work.

Betty Lou Hebert

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
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5 posted 2001-07-12 07:57 PM


Welcome to Passions!! Wonderful first poem to share.   I hope we'll get to see many more?  

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Our background and circumstances may have influenced who we are, but we are responsible for who we become.

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rwood
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since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793
Tennessee
6 posted 2001-07-12 09:16 PM


How nice to meet you New. I love your poem. He is able to pick us out of the crowd and make us his own. If we could all be as strong and deeply rooted as the tree. Lovely.
Sincerely,
Rwood

neweyeday
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since 2001-07-12
Posts 19

7 posted 2001-07-13 07:17 AM


Thank you for your kindness...Whtdove, Trillium, Lighthousebob, and Rwood..

may he bless you for your welcoming of a stranger..

2dalimit
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since 2000-02-08
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Mississippi coast
8 posted 2001-07-14 06:16 AM


Sky:
Yes, welcome to this group. I enjoyed your poem very much. Like Bob commented, EVEN the trees praise God. Thank you.

Melton  

Stephanos
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Statesboro, GA, USA
9 posted 2001-07-15 12:41 PM


This poem is a gem.  But the only thing I ask is about the line "with a sun color mouth"... wouldn't that be sun colored mouth?  Anyway that was also a really great line that hit me just right.

Look forward to more!

Stephen

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Oregon
10 posted 2001-07-15 04:53 PM


Wonderful!!!  What a grand analogy and marvelous message.

W-E-L-C-O-M-E

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