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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA 
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Behold the mountains in the light That heralds the passing of the night. They rise majestically, serene. Their timbered slopes, the darkest green And up above, where snow fields lie, That capture color from the sky, The faintest shade of pink is born, To usher in approaching morn. The hush is broken before long, By birds, who sing their morning song. Small clouds appear far overhead. The sun bursts from it's eastern bed And looking at this lovely view, Which moves the soul, my heart sings too And if you think that this is grand, Just wait till God reclaims His land! Betty Lou Hebert Published in Tucumcari Literary Review and in The Sunflower Dream, 1998 [This message has been edited by Trillium (edited 05-05-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Iambic Tetrameter is a great form to use, but the second line was one syllable over. I think if you remove the first "the," it would fit Iambic Tetrameter best.  "That heralds passing of the night." Otherwise, great poem. The flow was incredible.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is beautiful Betty and I guess Allen is right. I have never seen you stumble in the least before. Great poem. Joyce |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear Allen: You are right and thanks for drawing this to my attention. I don't know how I missed this, as it is really quite obvious. Not concentrating hard enough! Glad you liked it anyway. Joyce: Thanks for commenting and for also catching my mistake. Betty Lou Hebert |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
This is majestically perfect. The mental challenge is magnificent. Melton |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Encore!! This was perfection! What beauty is displayed here. This takes me back to those mornings in Colorado, when I could watch the sun come up and hit the top of the mountains. It was a breathtaking sight every morning! I so appreciated being able to view that scene. Thanks for bringing me back. <*\\\>< |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Melton: Thank you so much for your nice comments. WhtDove: Thank you and glad this brought back special memories for you! Betty Lou Hebert |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Magnificent poetry, You are surely a master of your craft and This poem is exquisite in every way....I could feel and see the imagery you so beautifully created! Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Superbly crafted, Betty, absolutely serene and yet invigorating with the promise of a wonderful day. Your eyes are sharp your vision clear, thanks for sharing this, my dear.  |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear ellie and VAS: Both of you made such lovely comments about this poem. Thanks you very much. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BettyLou~ Stunning. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Trillium Your poem paints a beautiful picture that really brings the reader into it to enjoy. Very picturesque.... makes me dream of what the new Heaven and the new Earth will be like one day when we see the sun set for the last time. Bob <>< |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Yes, we may be in a perputual beauty of morning, one that we can enjoy fully awake with our eyes open. Lovely thought provoking poem. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Marge, Bob and Songbird: Thank you all for reading and making such nice comments. Betty Lou Hebert |
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