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The Sword |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas 
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The Sword I saw a sword the other day- It's blade was notched, and marred by rust- How I wished it had a tongue- Could tell of every single thrust- And parry, which it's owner made. And tales of comrades he did mourn- And battles won? or battles lost- Ere from the field his corpse was borne. And barrack tales of life and love- The girls the warrior left behind To die upon a foreign field- His memory fresh in every mind. A mother in some distant ville- Recalls the day she gave him birth- And knows because he's not returned No longer does he walk this earth. I know there's not, but wish there were- Valhalla for the warriors bold- With buxom wenches, flagons sweet- And shields and harness made of gold. Ah, faithful blade, your master's gone Yet in his grasp you once held sway- You slew an escort ere he fell- O'er River Styx to lead the way. ------------------ Live large, people! ~GS~ http://www.geocities.com/montcogunslinger/HomePage.html |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Ohhh.... this was great! I love it! Great poem Gunslinger! Hehe, I especially love the river Styx in.. I must say again, great poem! ------------------ "'Cause there's a hunger, a longing to escape, from the life I live when I'm awake" - Creed - "Higher" |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Aahhh! I liked this alot! What a grand tale of the true story behind a sword....if only we knew. That is truly a fabulous thought....I love collecting "old stuff" that's in good shape, just because I know there must be some interesting stories behind them when they belonged to those before us many years ago....Thanks for sharing this fabulous piece! Really makes you think... ------------------ ~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Fabulous GS! A very well told tale. Thought inspiring, you never fail to amaze me with your flexiblity. |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
I have to say I loved the mention of Valhalla in your poem. It rather suprised me but also made me think of some good times I've had with my horse. You see, she's from the Valhalla Arabian horse farm... But I sold her, so I hadnt thought about her for awhile. The mention was a good reminder. Again, thanks ------------------ Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Incredible work with this piece, the detail and feeling are more than palpable. 'Tis sure to become a favorite of mine. On Valhalla, I know of a few who still follow Odin and the Norse pantheon religiously, either way I love the concept. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) [This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 11-27-1999).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very good poem, sir! I like to look at antiques and wonder what happened to bring them to this place...who touched them? Where has it traveled?  |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
The stories that could be told if these relics could speak! You have done a wonderful job with this piece, Gunslinger! As always!  ------------------ Denise |
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