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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I'll breathe for you each day, Comfort you through all the pain, Gently kiss your fears away, You can turn to me and cry, Always understand that, I give all I'm inside, I'll breathe, Sinking to the memories, Drowned in you, I won't stop breathing Till I get to make you my life, Memories are faded, Till you found me, Till I found you, Finding my soul, There you are my arms, Holding you so tight, I'll breathe every minute, As time rolls by, I still keep breathing for you each day, support your troubles, Comfort you in my arms, Gently kiss your fears away, Whisper softly to me, Softly spoken words, From my mind, Thinking about you and me, Between the lines, I want to get out I'll lay awake awhile, Till I'm high enough, I can forget all those things People put on my mind, Let memory come, I'll find my soul, I'll breathe once more, To remind myself, I'm in love, I won't let you, I won't hesiate it all, To stop from you [This message has been edited by vandana (edited 11-23-1999).] |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Nice work you got there, sweet piece. Maybe I'm not quick enough, but the last line has me kind of confused... any help? ------------------ "'Cause there's a hunger, a longing to escape, from the life I live when I'm awake" - Creed - "Higher" |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Very nice vandana. |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I enjoyed this a lot, very beautiful. Keep it up! ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "If my heart had wings, I would fly to you and lie beside you as you dream....." ~Faith Hill: If My Heart Had Wings~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Well, this was really good - the very first line did it for me - I think that said it all! This is one of my favorites "thoughts" for a poem...I love the whole concept of "lovers" sharing breath and stares....  ------------------ ~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale |
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