Open Poetry #4 |
The Redhead Down The Lane |
Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
The Redhead Down The Lane ... ~Marge Tindal~ 1999 She could shake it with the best of them, the redhead down the lane. She brightened up the neighborhood with just her lively mane. She was adorned with the crowning touch that God saved for the best. She wore just a touch of devilment, when putting her charms to the test. Her glorious locks were always blowing in the wind. She could turn the head of every man and every eye took her in. The neatest thing about her, was her way of making friends. She'd bat her eyelashes, green eyes flashing ... and everyone's heart she would win. The redhead down the lane looked like an angel from Heaven. The redhead down the lane has just turned seven. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] [This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 11-22-1999).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Chortle chortle chortle! I like this very much Marge. This crreates a perfect image of a child running around with captivating charm. I just wonder what you think of this line: 'and everyone's heart she would win' as 'everyone's heart she'd win'? It just seems to my ears to flow a little more. |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Oh, Marge. This is precious! ------------------ Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more? |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Severn - Yes, she's captivating indeed. OhMe - So glad to make you smile. Thank you for thinking she's precious. She is the redhead down the lane ... and she is simply adorable. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
going to be a man killer when she gets older |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hoot - You got that right. She leaves 'em in her wake even now. Thanks for liking. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
I've got two good friends who have a daughter. They're both dark haired and dark eyed with olive complextion... their daughter has curly red hair, pail skin and blue eyes. A throw back to several generations of the husbands Scotish blood. She'll be a man killer for sure. Liked this one too. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Thank you, Andrew. I'd prefer to think that the 'creme' rose to the top with that little redhead friend of yours. Thanks for the read. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, Marge! I second that creme rose to the top, I myself, not being Scottish, but of Celtic descent!! (my siblings and I being the last full blooded Irish in the family) ------------------ Denise |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What a delight... both the poem and the child! *G* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Thanks Denise. Way to go with the 'creme-de-la-creme. Suthern- Glad you liked the delight. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Just playing in my own word-sandbox today~ Some folks actually NEVER get to the archives ... and there are sooooo many, many friends that I like to find who have posted on my threads ... softie that I am~ ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Beautiful ARCTIC WIND |
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