»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #4
»
Three Little Critters (Challenge tween Devine and I)
| Open Poetry #4 |
|
Three Little Critters (Challenge tween Devine and I) |
|
|
WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois 
|
The challenge was to use the first two sentances that I have here. The last thing I expected Was the first thing that I saw When I looked from my window And I stood there just in awe I saw three little babies There was no mother ‘round They jumped and climbed and tumbled Really playful on the ground. Three furry little critters With their tiny painted masks Their three ringed little tails As they scrounged around for snacks Such curious lil’ critters But so lonely on their own With their momma not around Would they make it to be grown? Two of them, they scampered up To the top of the tree’s limbs But one of them just sat there Wasn’t running on a whim So slowly I approached him While extending out my hand I thought I might get bitten But it went how I had planned Think he was as scared as me He didn’t move a muscle I put my hand out towards him And gave a nervous chuckle He sat there still and quiet As my hand pet his rough fur And as I gently stroked him I wondered, where was his mother? I watched these little babies As they stayed around and played Long as you stood back and watched The lil’ critters weren’t afraid For many days I watched them Then one day they disappeared Don't know if they just ran off Or were roadkill, that I feared Three tiny little raccoons And they filled my days with joy Wonder where it is they went With no mother to convoy [This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 11-22-1999).] |
||
| © Copyright 1999 WhtDove - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
'Tis a truly pleasant scene your well-spun verse has wrought. Very good Becca.  ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
||
|
Spring Heeled Jim Junior Member
since 1999-11-22
Posts 19Paris, Texas |
Made me smile ------------------ On tops all I need I got rythm when I bleed |
||
|
Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You did it! I'm impressed. Geez, now I have to get cracking on mine! I liked your story here - cute poem.  |
||
|
WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Well thank you Scott for your reply, I appreciate that! SHJim, glad it brought a smile to you! And welcome to Passions!!! PdV thanks! You know you still have time, I just happened to finish early that's all! The STORY IS TRUE BTW! |
||
|
Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Nice job Dove.... |
||
|
Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful little story Dove. Enjoyed it, made me smile. |
||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Cute one Whtdove |
||
|
WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Thank you dear Toe! Thank you Marilyn, glad you enjoyed it! Thank you Hoot! |
||
suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
But if those little critters Wandered too far way down south They're on some redneck's stove tonight Filling a hungry mouth! Sorry, Dovie... couldn't resist! *G* I enjoyed this very much! *S* |
||
|
Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Delightful WhtDove....liked this much ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
||
|
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
So cute! I loved it! ------------------ Denise |
||
|
Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hey, Dove, I think I saw them down at that Chinese restaurant as Blue Plate specials, you know, the one that put out that new cookbook "50 ways to wok your dog". KIdding, Dove! Just kidding! I'm sure they're all right. Delightful poem, little dove. |
||
|
WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
LOL Suthern! That's quite alright! Hmmn, wonder how that would taste. LOL Pepper thanks so much! Thank you Denise glad you enjoyed it. BALLADEER!!! LOL Blue Plate special... very funny. Thanks much buddy!!!! |
||
|
Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
awwwwwwe I think the 'coons made it to Cali and ended up in my backyard LoL. I like this very much, considering I love 'coons and all! Tis cute indeed! ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
||
|
WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Thanks Echo! I prefer to think they left my yard to go to yours. Instead of Suthern and Balladeer's thoughts! LOL... |
||
|
Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Angel, such a lovely poem, just love those little critters ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
||
|
WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Thanks DA! |
||
Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
WhiteDove - What a delightful poem. I'm glad PoetDeVine challenged you. This one is a keeper for sure. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
||
|
WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Thank you Marge. I challenged her with the first line, then she challenged me with the second, and we just combined the two together! LOL |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||