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Candle's Glow
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Candle's Glow |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Candle's Lovely Glow In trembling aft of evening hour Weakness pulls the youthful flower Who trembles not of evening's cold But tropic's day hour to behold On canvased bed with birthing child And visions torn and visions wild The spirit asks the truth of it Why only friend's a candle lit And what did bring such bitter hour Just candle's light to soothe the flower Why not another soul to bear Why not another soul to care For worse the solitude and pain And worse the degradating shame And worse the nearness door of death The solitude of child's breath And worse than fear disguised as cold The truth unable to be told The spirit asks then how it so That life itself rejection know And how it so a spirit come To be received by only one Why not a dozen eyes to know A spirit new in candle's glow Within each wick a wicked truth A sharpenned daggar felt in youth And visions of the long ago Still seen in candle's lovely glow Elizabeth Santos 11/21/99 [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 11-21-1999).] |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
I love the last stanza. How sad and touching. This is definately a keeper. ------------------ Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, You paint in wonder of a life That tares my heart to read its strife It reads as part of a whole and I'll burn it a candle in my soul. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
RS Thank you, dear Poet. Elizabeth [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 11-21-1999).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, Candles are lovely, though. Aside crystal snowflakes, they're one of my favorite things. Within the well of sorrow lives joy by its side. Elizabeth |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
So touching and so well written.... Elizabeth...this IS a keeper! ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Pepper, I thank you for your kind remarks to this and to another poem which I didn't acknowledge so as not to bring again to the front of the forum. And incidently, where is your poetry? Elizabeth |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I've yet to read one of yours which is NOT a keeper. This one is no exception. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Such words from a Balladeer deeply touch my heart Elizabeth |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Elizabeth your talent is brighter than a hundred candles all lit together  You do write such wonderful poetry. Thanks for sharing it here!------------------ Time's fun when you're having flies~~Kermit the Frog |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
From forth the taper's flame, beauty of the soul hath came. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Elizabeth.....I am in awe of your abilty as I am of others...to keep the beat going through the whole poem. I used to do that so many years ago... Robert Mongo just pawn in game of life. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Robert, Mike and Caroline, Thank you so much. You light up my heart Elizabeth |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Another beautiful flower from your soul! ------------------ Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Denise, Can't wait til your daughter is married so I can get to know this gentle soul. Elizabeth |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth - The Crimson Rose lit by the soft glow of candlelight. This is so typically lovely of what we've come to expect from your heart. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Marge, what sweet words. Thank you Elizabeth |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
By the candle's soft shed light There captured in the glow Is a gentle poet soul I've priveledge to know Her name it is Elizabeth Which means an oath from God She sheds her light in graceful beams Where ever she does trod We at passions have been blessed With her friendship and her rhyme Elizabeth, your words in verse Will stand the test of time Elizabeth, your words are as beautiful as the spirt who writes them. Hugs Ruth ------------------ Alis volat propriis (She flies with her own wings) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Ruth Had words you wrote been on a page The blotted ink would have no age For tears would then have washed away The beautious words into the bay And from the bay the ocean swell Would carry words and thoughts as well Into the virgin ocean deep The passionate poets words to keep But sun then beating down on wave Would take the words the poet gave And heats evaporation rise Into the endless virgin skies And sky would hold forever more The poets words on planet floor And beaming down in moonlit night The virgin planets' virgin light And spelled across the virgin sky The words that made the poet cry Elizabeth |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh Elizabeth.....that was beautiful....we got to quit making each other cry like this |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Ruth, Right now you are making us all weep with your beautiful poetry Elizabeth |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Excellent, Keep the candle burning! |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Elizabeth this was wonderful thanks for sharing.. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wht Dove, Thank you for all your lovely comments on my poetry, but somehow I feel that I am not the one who's writing, because there's never a forthought to the verse and the poem is written before I can write it, faster than the hand can write or the fingers type. So therefore it comes from somewhere else. Elizabeth Tori - and thank you so much for reading Elizabeth |
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