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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Clutching close my invitation I enter with much trepidation. I glance to where you're holding court... Your laugh rings out, your friends cavort With such glee. I wonder why I came tonight - Thoughts of arms holding me tight Seem foolish even to this dreamer. Your eyes are on that brazen schemer Not on me. I wish that I could get away Before I have to hear you say Your heart belongs to another. I try to breathe, I almost smother All alone. But the dance continues as I cry Whirls of color whisper by. I gaze with longing at the door - I must cross that endless floor To get home. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, One fine piece of work, enjoyed the poem. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
suthern I love the way you write, you paint such a vivid picture, felt like I was standing there too.....great poem  |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Hmmph! What a meanie! Great poem X ------------------ "We have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night" (Tombstone epitaph of two amateur astronomers) |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Very nice, I really enjoyed this one. You need to write more often so we can enjoy your talent. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Yassee? I have to play hookie from class to read this! Lost Dreamer, I've been telling her and telling her to write....But nooooooo! As soon as I give up telling her to do things, the silly @$%%$ goes and does it? Wimmin! |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
[email protected] ain't we sumpthin? and yep suthern's the cream of the sumpthins or something like that, its supposed to read as a compliment, but I got lost in the wording lol, you know I love you girl...and yep will agree with toe....WRITE MORE! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you all very much for your kind comments... I'd almost posted this one yesterday when I found it (it's an oldie that I was trying to avoid having to retype *G*)... but I'm so glad I didn't. I don't post that often, but as luck would have it, I've posted a poem and watched Open #1 freeze up, posted a poem and despaired as Open #2 cratered... I think I would have had to take it personally if I'd posted yesterday and closed down Open #3! LOL. Again, thanks... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Toerag: Well I keep giving you other offers, sweets... of all the things I'd like to do... Can ya blame me if writing isn't top on my list?? LOL. Lovey: Watch it, gal... or you'll get sour cream! LOL |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Well done my friend, excellent as always but what a fool he was... HUSG ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Blondie Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 307Ohio |
Wonderful piece here suthern, I really enjoyed it! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Suthern, I too enjoy your writing and like the others would like to see more Great poem here.... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nice ------------------ Alis volat propriis (She flies with her own wings) |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you, ladies... I'm glad you liked!RG: Nope... I'm the fool. *S* Pepper: I could say the same about you! *G* Thanks! |
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fatwah Junior Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 16 |
very nice, i enjoyed this a lo. ps. what has happened to watcher? |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Suthern, this poem is very, very well written, rhyme, style, meter, the whole ball of wax. You have to expect these things by tagging around that cavortin' Toerag, though. Such a heartless lug he is. I know for a fact he scotch tapes worms to the sidewalk just to watch birds get hernias! [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 11-09-1999).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
'Deer: Say what??? Just a sec while I pick up my dentures. *G* I don't think I've ever had rhyme or meter complimented... (though some do like my style! LOL... Ooops... back to poetry! *G*) And as soon as I finish ROFLMAO @ birdie hernias, you know you're in for a scolding for bad-mouthing that sweet Toe AGAIN! *G* |
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Aurora's Fire Junior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 28Oshawa, Ontario, Canada |
My favourite lines "But the dance continues as I cry Whirls of color whisper by" very nice, but very sad. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I like this a lot Suthern. : ) |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
ya ya, very sad, i was standin right beside ya....i was blended into the paper. ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done, Suthern! ------------------ Denise |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Been on that endless floor myself, it's like you take a step and the room stretches out 3 or 4 feet in front of you. Very enjoyable poem, suthern. Michael |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
Beautiful Auntie ... ... and I ditto Lovey (she hasn't been dittoed for so long, she forgot how it feels ... lol) ... you should write more ... ps : and you have to tell the Frenchie what a schemer is SMOOCH ! [This message has been edited by JTF (edited 11-10-1999).] |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Know this feeling well.Well done! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Oh yeah. I have been here, there and watched the dance. Damn, I love your writing. Alison |
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