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DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

0 posted 1999-11-18 02:41 AM

Sorrowful
self-loathing
fills the mind
for though despair
lays claim and hold
still
he has failed her
that kind Lady Fair
for whom his
honor
is now sold

Vigils broken thrice
echo constant
self-damning vice
within which flow
parasites
that feed on the hope
the need to cope
and be redeemed

Failure
echoes within me
as if I were
a hall of mirrors
reflecting myself
into infinity
collecting
fragments of thought
that pluck
insistently
at the web
in which
I am caught

Cannot once
the shackles
of duty
raise not
the hackles
of trust
in savage displays
of self-hate
that must incur
further debt
paid
by deepened despair
and regret?

©1999 DreamEvil

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
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"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade)

Sue
Member

since 1999-08-04

Posts 383
France

1 posted 1999-11-18 09:22 AM

Haunting. Almost frightening in its power, a great poem.

Ohme
Senior Member

since 1999-07-17

Posts 816
Texas

2 posted 1999-11-18 03:34 PM

Very well done, DE. Like reflecting myself into infinity!

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Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more?

[This message has been edited by Ohme (edited 11-18-1999).]

Yoin
Junior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 29

3 posted 1999-11-18 04:36 PM

Duty (giri) at times does carry much weight for a honorable man. But, because of this weight and the kind of man it takes to support it, it is a very special thing indeed.

Great poem Dream.

Yoin

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 1999-11-18 04:40 PM

This talks about thrice braking from the duty. The regret that is paid for each offense. My question is this. If the price is so very high, after the first offense, why wasn't the lesson learned?

Iloveit
Senior Member

since 1999-09-02

Posts 1121
NM

5 posted 1999-11-18 05:40 PM

*sigh* I always seem to understand your poetry so perfectly, that last verse is incredible, and its not so much thrice offence as it is an ongoing duty, that a real man cannot shrug....as I see it...good work

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

6 posted 1999-11-18 07:03 PM

Hmmm.
Sigh on your behalf.
Keep dreaming Dream - and know that you are not and never will be a failure. You of all people know that life brings constant challenges - and that you have the ability to meet them head on. Excellent work of course my friend.

U K Hero
Member

since 1999-08-08

Posts 266
England

7 posted 1999-11-18 07:16 PM

Mmmmm, love this style still trying to get the hang of it myself I have to say your dammed clever at it. Not to sur as to the topic and what you are trying to say, I will have to read it a few times more.

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