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Obedient Oblivion
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL 
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Obedient Oblivion She drove a 1988 Esquire station wagon with the driver's side window stuck in the Up position which is best because it kept the elements away from her life while taking kids to school five minutes before the bell, laundry on Mondays, keeping the beer cold and the remote where it should be Except a window stuck in the Up position can’t keep out the numbness of lonely nights staring at the ceiling weeping under heavy breathing… alcohol laden while she dreamed of coming home, parking the Esquire in the garage, then closing the door and leave the engine running. RB ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
wow, what a sad picture, real well written |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Thanks...it came to me as I was sitting in a McDonalds drive through and a lady in front of me was driving a 1988 Esquire wagon and she had to open the door to pay the girl for her food and she dropped all her money on the pavement. I felt sorry for her and wrote this poem as soon as I got home. Robert ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Whew, this packs a punch  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I hope never to find myself in front of you at McDonalds drive through and have you so vividly portray my life. Elizabeth |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You also can take anything and write something great, can't you?! Your explanation just reminded me of something similar that happened to my Mom, except she was on a bus with 2 or 3? of us kids, at rush hour and dropped all her fare money for her and us.....and that glaring bus driver...oh, I can't tell you had bad I felt for her. Sometimes life realllly stinks! ------------------ Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Darn Robert you got all that out of seeing her drop her change? Man oh man, I hope she don't go home and leave the car runnin in the garage. Good one though! I love how you come up with these. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
From such a miniscule happenstance you created an excellent piece. Definitely the mark of a poet. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
it just hit me..her life and that window stuck.....then it all poured out of me onto the screen ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RobertB, I enjoyed the poem, well done. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
thank you seymore! ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This was great Robert! So poignant, sad and real. The slice of life poem is my favorite. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
a slice of pie yes....coconut cream is my favorrrrr....what?? Oh slice of life....nevermind. :-} ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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