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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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fly on wings fly the path of a suffering dove this light far-fallen Fallen past all myth she's facing truth as fable gifts exchange of dreaming for forget heart's easing a star's death a tired life yearning her relief her memory's loss Loss of aching soul she's shining now over the alone adrift with a wish for forget just forget... dream no more lost light KM 16.11.99 [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 11-16-1999).] [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 11-16-1999).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Severn this is both sad and beautiful. Well done. ------------------ Denise |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
I have to agree with Denise. Beautifully done. ------------------ NOT IN VAIN If I can stop one heart from breaking I shall not live in vain; If I can ease one life from aching, Or cool one pain, Or help one fainting robin Into his nest again, I shall not live in vain. ~Emily Dickinson |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
The form is a wondrous rendition of the DNA helix, whether by accident or design it adds much to the effect of this piece. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Yes. Both sad and beautiful....I liked this much Severn..... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
wonderfully written Severn. Powerful words. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This has a haunting quality to it, Severn. It's very effective. |
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mc Member
since 1999-11-16
Posts 67México |
It is beautiful and it transmits a strange sense of peace. ------------------ mcestrada |
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Alexandrine New Member
since 1999-11-17
Posts 3 |
Your poem is like a delicate butterfly living only for today. Beautiful, sad, evolving into something else. I thoroughly enjoyed this. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Severn, go with the way you have with words. I think it will take you places. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Severn, so bittersweet this piece, beautiful and sad at the same time. My thoughts are with you. Ruth |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, I like the form agree with DreamEvil. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Thankyou all my friends. There are  and  at this time!Martie - that's really encouraging - thankyou. Ruth - yes, bittersweet indeed, Thanks my friend - for being there. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I agree with mc....I felt a strange sense of peace likewise....Sometimes, it helps to write of closure - maybe that's what I felt...closure. Forgetting and moving on in our lives is one of the hardest of obstacles....I find myself struggling with it everyday. Be strong, and continue writing with the beauty you have here - very uplifting even in hard times. Thank you for sharing. ------------------ ~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Oh pFF - I just have to say the graciousness of your reply made me want to cry! Thankyou so much... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
In the cocoon, waiting to emerge and find her wings. Oh, beautiful butterfly, thy name is Severn. Beautiful thoughts tied together in this one. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
It's funny, but not so long ago I did describe myself to someone as being very much like a butterfly - you must have read my mind - though I didn't include the beautiful part!!! You honour me Marge. |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
This one had my soul 'fluttering'..!!!! Thanks for the read.. ------------------ "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr |
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