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Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

0 posted 1999-11-09 08:36 PM

- I know posting in multiple forums is frowned upon, but this was met weel in Dark, and I wanted to see what everyone here thinks of it-

A solitary figure in the mist
Surrounded by mirrors
But it doesn't matter-she is blind
Black roses spring up
In every spot she treads
For each step brings her closer to her last

Ruby blood is dripping from her hands
Rusting the jealous grass at her feet
It envies her freedom
And loathes her for taking it for granted

But she doesn't feel the emerald blades
As they slice hatefully into her
At her feet, she sees only clouds
And above the stars are so bright

She is a poet- a dreamer
The forlorn wanderer, always alone
As she is alone now
With ruby blood dripping from her hands

But-had she once visited reality, she'd have seen;
She was the most beautiful angel
Rising from the ashes to meet a moonlit destiny
And everyone else- they were the ugly ones

But poets and dreamers live only in their fancies
And that's where she is now
With ruby blood dripping from her hands
Angering the rusty grass
And coloring the clouds crimson

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.

John Yaws
Senior Member

since 1999-10-09

Posts 860
Texas

1 posted 1999-11-09 08:53 PM

Excellent. Very well conceived, and equally well written.

Jennifer Marie O'Neil
Junior Member

since 1999-11-01

Posts 48
port charlotte fl/bklyn ny

2 posted 1999-11-09 10:27 PM

very deep - very good - and very much enjoyed

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Faith is to believe what we do not see, and the reward of faith is to see what we believe. AUGUSTINE

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 1999-11-09 11:45 PM

powerful!

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

4 posted 1999-11-10 03:56 AM

Still like this!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

5 posted 1999-11-21 09:18 AM

Great Poem Amy

No matter where it's posted

Jenny

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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.

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