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Martie
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0 posted 1999-11-15 06:38 PM


The Sky Admirer

Sometimes I wish
that I could find
an empty land
where I could stand
pure
in the desert dust,
swim on a glass lake.
I could be
a serene swan
or a lily,
the sky my admirer.

But one lone lily
hears no laughter,
a swan
in a lake without ripples
feels no touch
and the sky does not admire me
I admire the sky.

Still, sometimes I wish
that I could find
an empty land
that I cold fill,
where sweet stars fall
and noble deeds grow
and songs sing each to each
and home is the heart.



© Copyright 1999 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Andrew Scott
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1 posted 1999-11-15 06:47 PM


Such a nice wish... May it come true some day. Thanks for sharing.
JOY 14
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2 posted 1999-11-15 06:55 PM


Lovely! It creates such a nice image in my mind, one that I won't soon forget. Thanks.
Michael
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3 posted 1999-11-15 07:01 PM


Beautiful poem, Martie. lovely imagery.


Michael

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4 posted 1999-11-15 07:54 PM


Martie ... sounds so serene and lovely.
Thanks for taking me there.

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5 posted 1999-11-15 09:01 PM


Beautiful imagery, I hope you find the peace and contentment in your words some day
Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 1999-11-15 09:06 PM


Martie, The whole poem is beautiful, but you could have stopped at the end of the first verse and that in itself is an exquisite thought.
Elizabeth

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7 posted 1999-11-15 09:07 PM


This is fantastic! The kind of poem I wish I could claim as my own. Very poignant and melancholy. Well done Martie.
Severn
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8 posted 1999-11-15 09:09 PM


Actually - would you mind if I print this please?
Denise
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9 posted 1999-11-15 09:34 PM


This is beautiful, Martie. Lovely imagery!

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Denise


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10 posted 1999-11-15 10:24 PM


Martie, This is sounds like a perfect place to be. Enjoyed

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Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more?

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11 posted 1999-11-16 10:47 PM


This is going back up because it is too beautiful to go yet.
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