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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

0 posted 1999-11-15 01:08 AM

So kill me then
she says
my hand locked
around her throat
like a leech
clinging to its host
Okay responds
a cheery voice
that is my own
yet not
Hellish glee
lights
my maniacal eyes
reveling
in her submission
hand tightens
around
ivory white throat
dispassionate smiles
tug at my mouth
with her every change
in ever-purpling hue
lifting
her off the ground
adds speed
to the chameleon change
of color
she goes through
her body's convulsing
and silent plea
extinguish rage
and falling away
I look at these
killer's hands
sobbing wracks me
as I become
what I despise
Her hands cradle
my tremulous head
rocking me
into desperately
needed peace
easing me past
another fit

©1999 DreamEvil

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

1 posted 1999-11-15 01:11 AM

This is a work of fiction meant to show the depths of Intermittent Explosive Disorder. Please view it as such.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

Skyfyre
Senior Member

since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

2 posted 1999-11-15 01:14 AM

Disturbing -- but then, mental ilness does that, doesn't it? A chilling and apt description, my friend. The clarifier was a wise precaution.

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

3 posted 1999-11-15 04:04 AM

I am glad you clarified its origin, Scott..it is very well written, flows well and the frenzied loss of control is reflected in the short lined form. Good work.

suicidal dreams
Member

since 1999-09-28

Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA

4 posted 1999-11-15 07:08 PM

Nice piece here I really liked it much

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life is short kill quick

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

5 posted 1999-11-15 07:16 PM

I can relate to this all too well, my friend......

Very well done.

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

6 posted 1999-11-16 01:31 AM

WOW!
I felt this one through and through...a tidlewave of anger cascading down the page!

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

7 posted 1999-11-16 04:06 AM

Soul-Brother, WOW, my Friend, I liked this very much, I echo Christopher's comment.

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

PhaerieChild
Senior Member

since 1999-08-30

Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon

8 posted 1999-11-16 04:19 AM

Really like this one alot!! Maybe it explains the anger I feel lately and I don't know where it comes from.

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If you love me like music, I'll be your song.
~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

9 posted 1999-11-16 08:36 PM

Brilliant - tightly controlled piece I feel - it leads the reader tensely to the conclusion.

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