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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Whispers assail my unquiet mind echoing victims of past misdeeds Whispers of jagged sentiment clog my heart with knowledge that friends once so real are only plastic Whispers of a tormented child wreak havoc on a mind obsessed with detail Whispers of slanderous spite carve deep flaying open my soul Whispers speaking of peace well up from within cloaking thought in impenetrable fog Whispers and pleas spill silently from lips mute with untold despair Whispers... ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I think life is full of whispers too. But perhaps we should listen and act on some of them. Loved this.  ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Whispers can be good - they get your attention...and they can be bad - if you listen to the mean whispers, you may only hear the hurt, not the words.... I like this though...you're in a 'free verse' mood I see. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Whispers from within and from without. This is very well done Dream. I like this very much. ------------------ Denise |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Whispers......I always hear the whispers.....it is why I sleep with muic as loud as my mother will allow...to drwon out the whispers....I don't want to hear them...ever. ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I like Nice to see some free verse from you |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
It relieves me to know that someone else hears them, too! This was beautiful. Thank you for sharing it. --Kess ------------------ You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Loved this, Scott, especially the line "that friends once so real are only plastic." I too know the pain of that discovery. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Excellent Scott! You have a good ear for free verse, not hindered by your problems with tone....I think you should write more in this style, it suits you and seems to work very well.....this one also flowed nicely and seemed very well structured. Good stuff |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
I've never minded the whispers ... it's the screaming that undoes me. Speak to me in whispers ... DreamEvil, you got my attention. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
DE, Good one, enjoyed the read. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Liked this much Dream! Ya know ... you seem to master all formats you try! What talent! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
'Tis when the whispers become a shout or worse, hot breath behind you, that you truly need to worry. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
really good, enjoyed this much, the visions you create stay in my mind *s* |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Yes...and on it goes with no cessation. Well understood my friend. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
As always, a master of words...this is your best free verse yet, my dear. The flow is wonderful...very well done. ------------------ Time's fun when you're having flies~~Kermit the Frog |
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