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DreamEvil
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0 posted 1999-11-14 06:39 PM


Whispers
assail
my unquiet mind
echoing victims
of past misdeeds
Whispers
of jagged sentiment
clog my heart
with knowledge
that friends
once so real
are only plastic
Whispers
of a tormented child
wreak havoc
on a mind
obsessed
with detail
Whispers
of slanderous spite
carve deep
flaying open my soul
Whispers
speaking of peace
well up from within
cloaking thought
in impenetrable
fog
Whispers
and pleas
spill silently
from lips mute
with untold
despair
Whispers...


©1999 DreamEvil


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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


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Isis
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1 posted 1999-11-14 07:06 PM


I think life is full of whispers too. But perhaps we should listen and act on some of them. Loved this.

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~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Poet deVine
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2 posted 1999-11-14 08:08 PM


Whispers can be good - they get your attention...and they can be bad - if you listen to the mean whispers, you may only hear the hurt, not the words.... I like this though...you're in a 'free verse' mood I see.
Denise
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3 posted 1999-11-14 08:12 PM


Whispers from within and from without. This is very well done Dream. I like this very much.

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Denise


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4 posted 1999-11-14 09:14 PM


Whispers......I always hear the whispers.....it is why I sleep with muic as loud as my mother will allow...to drwon out the whispers....I don't want to hear them...ever.

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.



hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 1999-11-14 09:28 PM


I like Nice to see some free verse from you
Skyfyre
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6 posted 1999-11-14 10:51 PM


It relieves me to know that someone else hears them, too!

This was beautiful. Thank you for sharing it.

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.


Tara Simms
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7 posted 1999-11-15 12:25 PM


Loved this, Scott, especially the line "that friends once so real are only plastic." I too know the pain of that discovery.
Beki
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8 posted 1999-11-15 04:07 AM


Excellent Scott! You have a good ear for free verse, not hindered by your problems with tone....I think you should write more in this style, it suits you and seems to work very well.....this one also flowed nicely and seemed very well structured. Good stuff
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9 posted 1999-11-15 07:28 AM


I've never minded the whispers ... it's the screaming that undoes me. Speak to me in whispers ... DreamEvil, you got my attention.

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~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 1999-11-15 07:55 AM


DE,
Good one, enjoyed the read.

WhtDove
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11 posted 1999-11-15 08:06 AM


Liked this much Dream! Ya know ... you seem to master all formats you try! What talent!

DreamEvil
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12 posted 1999-11-16 10:29 PM


'Tis when the whispers become a shout or worse, hot breath behind you, that you truly need to worry.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


Iloveit
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13 posted 1999-11-17 10:01 AM


really good, enjoyed this much, the visions you create stay in my mind *s*
Severn
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14 posted 1999-11-17 07:43 PM


Yes...and on it goes with no cessation.
Well understood my friend.

caroline
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15 posted 1999-11-17 08:05 PM


As always, a master of words...this is your best free verse yet, my dear. The flow is wonderful...very well done.

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Time's fun when you're having flies~~Kermit the Frog



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