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Subtlety Of Thought |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Profoundly disturbed by the facts of life, I reflect on the urgency of death. I'm not one to give my wrist to the knife, despair will never steal my final breath. I reflect on the urgency of death, firmly standing upon my own belief. Despair will never steal my final breath, life is pain so death will be sweet relief. Firmly standing upon my own belief, pain gives me the strength I need to endure. Life is pain so death becomes sweet relief, that peace carries a seductive allure. Pain gives me the strength I need to endure, endurance marks the turn of each season. That peace carries a seductive allure, sometimes lust for peace will obscure reason. Endurance marks the turn of each season, while I fight despair with my written word. Sometimes lust for peace will obscure reason, that lets my mind churn over the absurd. While I fight despair with my written word, I'm not one to give my wrist to the knife. That lets my mind churn over the absurd, profoundly disturbed by the facts of life. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
This is an excellent piece, Dream. It is a good explanation of the thought behind it. ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I agree with Caroline, Dream. This is truly excellent. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "To be great is to be misunderstood...." - Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Well done indeed DE..! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Well done, Dream. The pain is quite evident in this. ------------------ Denise |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
A glimpse into your shadows, surely. Pain is a fact of life -- as such you may rely on it. Words thoughtfully spoken. --Kess ------------------ You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Julie Jordan Scott Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 146Bakersfield, CA USA |
Thought provoking, yet leaves me stuck in the paradox behind this word puzzle. ------------------ Julie Jordan Scott is a Freelance Writer and Public Speaker, but her favorite role is that of Mommy! Visit her website at http://www.5passions.com |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Lovely poem, Dreamie, I must agree with the opinion you express here.....however, I AM one to give my wrists to the knife, that is, if my life were to reach that point. However, I can understand where you come from......prolong the pain so that the relief is that much more joyous...... ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Cinderella Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 152Arizona |
What an emotional poem Dream......As long as we watch the sun shine and the moon set life is worth every minute we see! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Very well done, Dream. I'm glad you ended this the way you did, I often worry about you at times. This is a relief to read as well as a very good poem. Michael |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The poem is well done, though I don't agree with some people's fascination with the 'blade'. And I'm glad you don't either. [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 11-14-1999).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mind over matter... |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
neat one....I have comments but better keep them to myself!!!! ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
This touches something deep inside, I forgot was there. Exellent pantoum, DreamEvil. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Well Done....Dream!! I always enjoy reading your poetry!! This was very good!! Bridgette  ------------------ "It may take a boy to turn a girl's head, but it takes a man to turn a girl's heart." |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
The cruel facts of life Cannot be studied by a knife So write that poetry, my friend Pour out your sorrow with a pen Liz |
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