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Thinking Knowing Wishing....coments PLEASE
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Kiwi Junior Member
since 1999-12-24
Posts 10 |
Thinking Knowing Wishing..... I lay here in bed knowing you are doing the same But I know you are not thinking the same i am thinking of only you... Thinking of you and I together.. How happy we could be... To me you are thinking thinking the same Only deep down inside i am know you are thinking that you are ith another girl... A girl that is not me... But I still deep down inside Know that nothing could ever be there... Nothing there between us... But hey...at least can still wish...... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Kiwi, this has great potential to be a wonderful poem....go back and correct a few typos and re-read some of the lines that seem to need some tightening up and it will be great! Great thoughts you are trying to convey! Denise |
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