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Sea Of faith |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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 I tossed my heart into the deep blue sea Of love, and then, I watched it float away And wondered if it would drift back to me In waves that crash upon the shore someday The rhythm of the waves in cadence rang Where high upon the rocky cliff I stood And in eternal notes to him, I sang And hoped that he would answer if he could I threw my faith out to the sea that day Then looked to find him standing by my side He pulled me close to him above the bay And begged me cast my fears out to the tide I cast my love and faith out to the sea And in his arms he brought them back to me "I am nothing special, of this I am sure. I am a common man with common thoughts and I've led a common life. There are no monuments dedicated to me and my name will soon be forgotten, but I've loved another with all my heart and soul, and to me , this has always been enough." ~Nicholas Sparks from The Notebook [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 12-21-1999).] |
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samsonheart Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 72Missouri rez. |
This is sooooooo beautiful hoot, wow. wonderful poem. I really enjoy your work. samsonheart |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Samsonheart...(geez, I think I called you sampsonite before) thank you for your kind words. I very rarely attempt sonnets (this being only my 3rd attempt) and unless I know I've got it right, I don't label it as such because I usually mess up the meter somewhere in it. Not sure whether I pulled it off this time or not. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Beautiful!!! |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Lady Hoot: I haven't been able to play in the sandbox lately so I'm sure I've missed a great deal of wonderful writing. Glad I didn't miss this one... I have to say I like the emotional side of this one, but not having much poetic knowledge I can't say whether or not you accomplished your mechanical task. I hope you are doing well and the season is showing a kinder face than that of the past weeks. My best to you and yours. |
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Coegwyr Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 35 |
A well written and beautiful poem, thanks for sharing. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Excellent, my friend. *big slapping of hands together*  K |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
I always mess up on the meter in sonnets also, but I think this one is beautiful! HUGS |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
So very beautiful indeed Hoot..... Very special! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Can't say I know anything about sonnets Ruth. But I can say I love your message and emotions! <*\\\>< Jesus is the reason for the season Keep Christ in CHRISTmas |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
There is no sweeter victory than the one you find in the arms of your love. Beautiful masterpiece! You've painted a lovely picture, Ruth. It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ten syllables in each line, 14 lines, good meter = excellent sonnet. Beautiful job, hoot. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A+ for the technical aspects..... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Bravo! Well done! And so beautifully! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hoot - The judges results are in ... I think you scored a Perfect 10 ! Congrats ! Lovely ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you everyone |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
May the deepness of the sea carry your fears as far as the east from the west. I see the peace and calm feelings in this one you have wrote. Maybe it is the meter and the thought of waves and the sea. Maybe it is just you One of your best works I think Ruth. Share what you are for you are what you share |
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Rod Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 149Auckland New Zealand |
This is just wonderful! I could picture the whole scene vividly. Very well done indeed! Rod |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Furst Knight and Rod...thank you both so much |
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Fairy Colours Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 169Sunrise,Fl,US |
Oh, I could view the sea while reading this. Beautiful. --A Little Fairy-- |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Lovely imagery, Ruth. I do so enjoy sonnets! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you Sally and Fairy |
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