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Open Poetry #4

A walk in the park

mc
Member

since 1999-11-16

Posts 67
México

0 posted 1999-12-20 02:03 AM

A walk through the park
to meet you there in a blank
where there's an infinite song
only heard in my ears.

To see your face in a blink
to watch your body dance in trance
to jump to the moon
and find you there with a smile

To shine above all
to glitter with no gold
to see that smirk in your eye
remembering distance is in our mind.

To close my defense system
to allow become one in a touch
to find us in a glimpse
to glide in our park.

A walk through the park
no one knows about
to see the image of you
to meet the importance of us.

mcestrada

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

1 posted 1999-12-20 02:07 AM

WOW! This is wonderful!
Very well written, indeed!
Liz

mc
Member

since 1999-11-16

Posts 67
México

2 posted 1999-12-20 02:12 AM

Thank you LIZ, I'm sure glad you liked it!!!

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

3 posted 1999-12-20 03:17 AM

Mari my friend, I love this!
I love the word usage in here - 'glimpse, blink, blank'...wonderful

AND SO NICE TO SEE YOU POSTING AGAIN!!

Hugs and stuff.

mc
Member

since 1999-11-16

Posts 67
México

4 posted 1999-12-20 03:25 AM

Thank you my dear K, It's NICE to be back...

mcestrada

Seaangel
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 167
Auckland, New Zealand

5 posted 1999-12-20 03:55 AM

hi, mc, lovely poem! I look forward to more.

First__Knight
Senior Member

since 1999-11-08

Posts 678

6 posted 1999-12-20 03:59 AM

Very moving.....I like the line.."Importance of us." First read of your work.....and I will look for more

Share what you are for you are what you share

mc
Member

since 1999-11-16

Posts 67
México

7 posted 1999-12-20 12:42 PM

Thank you Sea and First K., I sure hope to post some more, your opinion encourages me.

mcestrada

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

8 posted 1999-12-20 12:57 PM

mc,
Tender is the word,
that's the one I heard.
Enjoyed.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

9 posted 1999-12-20 06:59 PM

I like this one...it speaks to me in it's simplicity

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