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How I was saved by love
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How I was saved by love |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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How I was saved by love I dreamt the raven spoke to me, In a gie of mute soliloquy. An epilogue in silent gesture, Of some coming guise of venture He stood an epitaph in state. Formal black his suit of clothes, Downward pointed his beak and nose. His actions seemed a weird malaise But his eyes were blood red ablaze, Implying I, some awesome fate. Then he cast a soothing spell, Like cooling waters of a well. That made me sink in passions plea In reference to my not to be. And my mind flew to abrogate. The raven tends oblivion, He tarries him on carrion. A fearful symbol and a guise, Impending doom of ones demise. Opening the gate, quick to late. I cannot say I welcomed him. Weather real or ghostly whim And I questioned his probate? But he shook his head in wait, And again he nodded the date. He plucked my soul in villainy I screamed a cry of agony. I swore to all the gods above, I could not go, I was in love. So he gently laid me back in bed And whispered me, I was not dead. |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Sounds like an oximorin to say such an elequent nightmare but indeed it is! Love it! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Whew! This would have been enough to make me glad I woke up!  Excellent, Sy!Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour - Awesome testimony to love. LUCKY MAN YOU ARE ! I enjoyed this post, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, Please! Don't go yet! Where would we be without your poetry. Lost! Your verse is fearsomly beautiful Amazingly descriptive Chillingly real Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
A Sandgrain, The closest I could find to oixmorin was oxymoron if thats what you meant I an flattered, thats a ten dollar word and I thank you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sweet Denise, Thank you for the read and comment, didn't mean to scare you. *L* Marge, So glad you enjoyed the poem, I alway wanted to write something like that. *L* Sy Liz, Don't plan to go for a while, Your adjectives gave me a flush or is it blush? *L* Sy |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This one is pretty intense, Sy.... I'm glad you're hanging around, though - ya know???.... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, I read this on the run the first time Didn't have a chance to say that I liked the form of this poem Very, very, very nice Love ya, Liz |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Man, this is wonderful, Sy. Precious ending, I guess love truly does conquer all. Michael |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
WOW! A big resounding clapping noise echoing from the poetic dome of my mind! You captured me with every line, Sy. I do have one question - is 'Weather' deliberate or meant to be 'whether'? I'm just curious - I read it both ways and they both make sense. Master poet, take a bow for this one. K |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
(hands Seymour the "Dazzling Poem" trophy and runs off...don't want that bird to see me.) great poem Mr. Tabin It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, For you I'll hang around. *L* Sy Liz, You got me with the verys Every one went through my heart. *L* ya, Sy Michael, You got that right, Love conquers all. Severn, It's a mute point, I was concious of the two, And thought I'd use the more obscure one. Whether would be more one directional? I think, what do you think I value your opinion. *L* Sy |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wow...spine tingling wow! I'm glad I'm in love! LOL If that's what keeps us alive, then so be it !!  Fabulous read my friend! Glad I found it and brought it back! - - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well, Sy, I like it as 'Weather' too - for it adds to the metaphorical content and encourages the reader to pause and think - a great thing in a poem. Whether is indeed one directional, my friend. I felt that weather gives two qualities - a concrete reality and also as ravens are harbingers of storms and omens - it also juxtaposes against the traditional concept of weather as said concrete element; creating an emotional storm. What do you think? (Reminds me of Poe) K |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow, Wow, Wow..............you have outdone your self on this one Seymore. What a piece of writing!! I absolutely love the format you chose to display your fine words in with this one...it does much to add to the poem. "He plucked my soul in villainy I screamed a cry of agony. I swore to all the gods above, I could not go, I was in love. So he gently laid me back in bed And whispered me, I was not dead." What can I say...these words hopefully will be a classic someday like Poe's the Raven. Great job!!!! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I applauad you Sy.... Haunting and Wonderful Great Poem! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
PFF, Thank you sweet, your answer was neat. *L* Sy Severn, Thank you doll, I think I'll leave it. *L* sy Hoot, Thank you for the classic comp, Love you too Sy Pepper, Haunting is what I was looking for, bless you *L* Sy |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn Sy you go  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is the one |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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