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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

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0 posted 1999-12-16 06:53 AM

If romantic moods require delight
then must your embrace inspire delight.

I live for the time I might know your touch.
The rush of your touch is dire delight.

Magic enchantment is cast by your words.
Your silken voice sets afire delight.

My mind is jaded by all that I see.
Lost in your eyes I find higher delight.

Yours is the love I've dreamed of all my life.
Your mind eclipses all prior delight.

©1999 DreamEvil

Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
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"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 1999-12-16 09:03 AM

Scott my friend...I am very happy that you can find such delight. May this always be...

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

2 posted 1999-12-16 09:27 AM

Lots of delight in this one

Delightful my friend

Julie Jordan Scott
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since 1999-09-19

Posts 146
Bakersfield, CA USA

3 posted 1999-12-16 09:32 AM

I can hear the musical quality to this one, it makes me want to sing....can you hear it?

I am a Life Purpose Coach who specializes in assisting
men and women to clarify their Life Purpose and then in turn
live true to their purpose. After 5 years working with the
Severely Mentally Ill in County Mental Health, I gave up the
bureaucracy (and safe, secure blanket) of this environment
to pursue my own purpose and passion.

Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

4 posted 1999-12-16 09:36 AM

"The rush of your touch is dire delight .."

Love the use of "dire" and "delight" together ... they are seemingly unrelated, but it makes them all the more effective when you put them together!

--Kess

You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

5 posted 1999-12-16 02:43 PM

Ah Dream, this is musically magical! I agree with all that was stated above! I just wanted to keep reading, it was so fresh - like spring air, to my soul. Thank you for sharing probably one of my favorites of yours! Back to the top for more to enjoy! ***curtsies

- - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF

Severn
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since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

6 posted 1999-12-16 03:09 PM

Dear dream, you are engaged in much romantic rambling at present - I for one am inclined to agree that it suits you.

- keep rambling, you do it well!

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

7 posted 1999-12-16 07:14 PM

Interesting use of words in this one..and there's a cadence to it that flows nicely from one verse to another...

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 1999-12-16 07:18 PM

DreamEvil -
Flows like a gentle babbling brook.
Words afloat .. beautiful.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise

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since 1999-08-22

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9 posted 1999-12-17 01:23 AM

Yes, this flows beautifully! A pleasure to read!

Denise

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

10 posted 1999-12-17 05:30 AM

I echo all the above Scott, a beautiful read indeed.

What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

11 posted 1999-12-17 07:15 PM

For those interested, the poem format I used is called a ghazal. It is a format from Iran (10th Century B.C.). It also follows the radif convention, meaning that the phrase or words just preceeding the end refrain (delight) must rhyme in each second line of every couplet. The word "ghazal" actually means "talking to women."< !signature-->

Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
-------------------------------------------------------
"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)

[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 12-17-1999).]

Christopher

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since 1999-08-02

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Purgatorial Incarceration

12 posted 1999-12-18 03:21 AM

Exactly my friend, that "right" person can make all others seem dull by comparison!

Beki
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since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

13 posted 1999-12-24 07:05 AM

Hmmm, honestly Scott the repitition here doesn't work for me, but there is some very effective imagery...
"The rush of your touch is dire delight."
and
"My mind is jaded by all that I see.
Lost in your eyes I find higher delight."

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

14 posted 1999-12-24 08:17 AM

This was a pleasure to read
Liz

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