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Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 1999-12-15 11:01 PM

O, distant life, demanding more attention,
Abandon me, so I may see my dear.
And take with thee the ever granted tension
And make the irksome troubles disappear.
God, cleanse my mind of thoughts it often sees
And let it rest, in the embrace of void.
Erase the letters, numbers and degrees--
The company by which I am employed.
Instead, allow me to imagine that I’m warm
And undisturbed by fierce and brute December
And let the vacuum of my mind take on her form,
With which informed, my mind shall remember.
Into the vacant thought, when thought does part,
I’ll pour her spirit from the abyss of my heart

I fell in love and kept on falling

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 1999-12-15 11:05 PM

Dwelling too much on the future can surely cause much distress in the present! Very good Master.

Denise

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

2 posted 1999-12-16 06:30 AM

Thank you Denise!

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 1999-12-16 09:34 AM

wonderful work my young poet friend

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

4 posted 1999-12-16 08:56 PM

Thank you Hoot, my young at heart, adult friend! *S*

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

5 posted 1999-12-19 12:07 PM

You sure have a beautiful way with words! I love your style of rhyme....Flows exquisitely! I must say, I'll be looking for more from you to read! I am an avid fan after just one bite! ROFL

- - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

6 posted 1999-12-19 12:18 PM

Thank you poetFemmeFatale and what a beautiful name! I'm glad you liked this one, I just started writing sonnets and it's been fun. It's a great style indeed, but I often have problems with the iambic meter. Anyway, thank you for responding and keep biting *S*!

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

7 posted 1999-12-19 08:24 AM

I'm so glad to see you venturing into the world of sonnets.... You're doing a great job...

Think we could convince you to try pantoums? villanelles? sestinas???

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

8 posted 1999-12-19 10:36 AM

Well, I've tried villanelles, that didn't work. As for the other two I don't even know the style.

[This message has been edited by Master (edited 12-19-1999).]

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