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Master
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0 posted 1999-12-12 07:18 PM


Be still my heart, your beating is too loud
It may awake the Gods, who’ve missed my deed
Instead, beat very calmly, make the pale proud
And pave uncertainty with dense concrete
Let eyes reflect not what they saw tonight
But, rather shine with glory that they’ve chased
Let time be counterfeited in my sight
And happiness be mimicked on my face
Fair heart, digest your deepest inner feelings
As if a cyclone that consumes brave ships
Let no debris arise in any dealings
The safest lie is that which always sleeps
By doing so, don’t let observers see
The secret that is known to you and me

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 I fell in love and kept on falling



[This message has been edited by Master (edited 12-13-1999).]

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Elizabeth
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1 posted 1999-12-12 08:18 PM


Another fantastic piece, Master. I've tried to write sonnets but have not yet succeeded (they're hard!). Liked it much!

 Nail to the mast her holy flag,
Set every threadbare sail-
And give her to the god of storms,
The lightning and the gale!
-Oliver Wendell Holmes


Denise
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2 posted 1999-12-12 08:41 PM


This is so beautiful, Master!

 Denise



Master
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3 posted 1999-12-12 11:20 PM


Thank you Elizabeth, this is the first time I've written a sonnet and it didn't seem that hard. Give it another try!
Denise, again thanks for your comments and suggestions!

hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 1999-12-13 11:51 AM


Wonderful work Master....you talents amaze me as I have told you so many times.  
jbouder
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5 posted 1999-12-13 12:19 PM


Very nice work, M. (enjoying having everyone call you Master?   ).

 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther


Nan
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6 posted 1999-12-13 05:48 PM


Sonnets are one of my favorite formats, M... This is pretty darned good for your first effort - A couple of very minor meter tucks to smooth out your pentameter and it will be perfectomundo!!!.....

Keep writing these - You're really good at it...

Master
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7 posted 1999-12-13 09:38 PM


Thank you everybody!
And Jim, I'm loving it!!!

Denise
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8 posted 1999-12-13 11:11 PM


      

 Denise



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