Open Poetry #4 |
Macbeth 4 (a sonnet) |
Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Be still my heart, your beating is too loud < !signature-->It may awake the Gods, who’ve missed my deed Instead, beat very calmly, make the pale proud And pave uncertainty with dense concrete Let eyes reflect not what they saw tonight But, rather shine with glory that they’ve chased Let time be counterfeited in my sight And happiness be mimicked on my face Fair heart, digest your deepest inner feelings As if a cyclone that consumes brave ships Let no debris arise in any dealings The safest lie is that which always sleeps By doing so, don’t let observers see The secret that is known to you and me I fell in love and kept on falling [This message has been edited by Master (edited 12-13-1999).] |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Another fantastic piece, Master. I've tried to write sonnets but have not yet succeeded (they're hard!). Liked it much! Nail to the mast her holy flag, Set every threadbare sail- And give her to the god of storms, The lightning and the gale! -Oliver Wendell Holmes |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so beautiful, Master! Denise |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you Elizabeth, this is the first time I've written a sonnet and it didn't seem that hard. Give it another try! Denise, again thanks for your comments and suggestions! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wonderful work Master....you talents amaze me as I have told you so many times. |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Very nice work, M. (enjoying having everyone call you Master? ). Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sonnets are one of my favorite formats, M... This is pretty darned good for your first effort - A couple of very minor meter tucks to smooth out your pentameter and it will be perfectomundo!!!..... Keep writing these - You're really good at it... |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you everybody! And Jim, I'm loving it!!! |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Denise |
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