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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I remember the fall of your tears as I stare out at the rain. I recall the passage of the years, with echoes of all the pain. You cherished the life God did bestow, so you rose to meet each dawn. We died today just one year ago, now alone must I live on. My hand touches the tears on my face, just as my heart feels the ache. The flood of memories I embrace, are more than most men could take. The moonlight reflected off your eyes, would make me weak in the knees. I heard your love even in your sighs, and saw it in your striptease. Snowflakes once graced your hair like a veil, each sparkled like a jewel. The scent of your skin I would inhale, what passion that would fuel. Your lips quivered with our first kiss, your hesitant tongue touched mine. We first made love in eloquent bliss, with you I reached the divine. For a year today I've lived with grief, I've kept it bottled inside. Your death stole joy like a common thief, then it stripped me of my pride. I still hear echoes of your laughter, that touch me out of the past. I feel the sorrow that came after, the breath that became your last. At times I think I feel your presence, when at the end of my rope. The love that was our quintessence, lends me the power to cope. ©1999 DreamEvil Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Breathlessly beautiful, dark one. Well done indeed. |
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Rod Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 149Auckland New Zealand |
Moving - and powerful Regret and sorrow hang from this poem like dark baubles. Hope there will soon be light. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Very beautiful, very sad. Nothing holds the neverending sting of someone we love dying. A touching piece of poetry, Dream.   Michael |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Soul-Brother this makes me sigh, so beautiful!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Very touching and very beautiful DE..... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DreamEvil - Very touching. I could feel the loss. Always hold on to those thoughts. You will move on ... but take these lovely memories with you. Especially the last line. ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Touching, powerful, sad. Very well written. It's hard to believe that you are tone deaf. Very well done. Denise |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
DE, I too find this to be sadly emotional. I couldn't even fathom dealing with such a loss as this. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You have expressed your love and loss so beautifully here dream--may time bring to you wisdom from this experience In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This stole my breath. So sad -- and yet so lovely, the memories you write of here. Beautiful. --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
As usual, you convey the deepest feelings here in a poem that is expertly done. I like the turn you are taking with your poetry lately, whatever you're doing, stick with it. But I still LOVE your free verse.  |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
This is beautiful, DE. I want to echo PDV about your free verse. It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Beautiful my friend |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Beautifully done, Dream! I enjoyed it. |
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Eboni Junior Member
since 1999-12-11
Posts 17Texas |
Very well put. Very nice. |
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Moonlight Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 105Auburn, Alabama USA |
I think you have really defined what love is with this poem, Dream... |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Always love your work Dream.....and this in another that shares that thought Share what you are for you are what you share |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Beautiful beginning to a beautiful poem, thanks for sharing. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
DE what a beautiful and powerful piece. The emotions just poured out. Very well done. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Wow Scott! This my friend, has come from you pen to my heart... I am almost speechless. There is a stark intensity to this that leaves me in awe and empathizing...coping is not necessarily a fun thing as I well know! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I must thank you all for the replies to this piece. It occurred to me as I read the replies to this one that some of those who replied thought this to be reality. It is in fact, fiction. I usually include a statement if the poem is based on or is a personal experience. I had not thought to do the latter, my apologies for any misconception this may have caused.< !signature--> Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) [This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 12-12-1999).] |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
This is incredibly beautiful, haunting, sad...it is awesome, whether it be fact or fiction. Wonderful work, my friend. I do so envy your magic.  It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Jayden New Member
since 1999-12-13
Posts 5Canada |
A very beautiful, deep poem. Very touching. |
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Dolphins3 Member
since 1999-09-30
Posts 135Wisconsin |
Wow, Very powerful and moving poem. Thanks for sharing it.  |
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