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Betty Gravitt
Member

since 1999-09-11

Posts 222
Georgia United States

0 posted 1999-12-08 11:01 PM

Mighty warrior's drum's beat
in the darkness of the night.
A wild thing is caught in flight.

At the net of the trap I pull,
seeking, searching a way to be.
For in my heart I long to see,
the unknown thing set free.

For a lifetime the trap has held.
Against many wild promises,
it has never failed.

The drums of life beat softer still,
a slow warm enchanting beat,
enticing the unknown thing beneath.

The blood rushes through my veins,
I cry out in my pain.
Oh how I long to see,
the unknown thing set free.

I fight hard with all my pride,
against the weakness stealing inside.

I can not loose,
yet I must fail.

Through tear dimmed eyes I see,
a warrior come to guide me.

In my weakness he gives me strength.
In my tears he finds a smile,
together we battle side by side.

Two hearts beating softly in the night,
arms holding each other tight.
On clouds of love we float away,
the unknown has been set free today.

B Gravitt

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 1999-12-08 11:10 PM

Betty -
You touched me with this one.
So very nicely played.
The Warrior's drumbeat ...
sets the wild thing free.
Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful !

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Betty Gravitt
Member

since 1999-09-11

Posts 222
Georgia United States

2 posted 1999-12-08 11:16 PM

Thanks Marge. i just don't know what else to say at this moment, because i've never written any thing like this before. So thanks again.

B Gravitt

Seaangel
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 167
Auckland, New Zealand

3 posted 1999-12-08 11:20 PM

I feel the longing for freedom clearly in this poem, until of course you fall in love and the unknown thing is freed. (Do you mind me asking what the unknown thing is? I'm not too clear on it.)
I like the poem very much, Betty.

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

4 posted 1999-12-08 11:21 PM

Well, for your first attempt, you certainly did an admirable job, Betty. Keep it up!

Betty Gravitt
Member

since 1999-09-11

Posts 222
Georgia United States

5 posted 1999-12-08 11:42 PM

I dont mind at all Seaangel. It is the passion of first love. Or at least that is what I was aiming for. Thanks.

Balladeer you always make me feel as long as I really try I can suceed. Thanks for the feeling.

I needed it tonight.

B Gravitt

RainbowGirl
Member Elite

since 1999-07-31

Posts 3023
United Kingdom

6 posted 1999-12-09 04:45 PM

It's worth the wait Betty..

)

HUGS

Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...

Betty Gravitt
Member

since 1999-09-11

Posts 222
Georgia United States

7 posted 1999-12-09 04:51 PM

Thanks RainbowGirl. I sure hope so, for I'm still waiting.

B Gravitt

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