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paperguardian
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since 1999-12-07
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0 posted 1999-12-08 10:38 PM



Here's to the dream,
and here's to the chance,
of living noble love,
of making this our dance.

Across the boundaries,
marked highways and hills,
that blesses with promise,
then breathlessly stills:

This heavenly plan,
that is envied by time,
of more number than the sand
one word more than rhyme.

Without hand upon hand,
that the distances part,
I will love you my best,
by heart bound to heart.

© Copyright 1999 paperguardian - All Rights Reserved
Seaangel
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 167
Auckland, New Zealand
1 posted 1999-12-08 11:04 PM


Beautiful, paper. I just hope the dream makes it! Good luck!
WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
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Illinois
2 posted 1999-12-08 11:27 PM


WELCOME   I just love that second stanza. And a big good luck from me too!

 <*\\\><
Jesus is the reason for the season


Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
3 posted 1999-12-08 11:32 PM


PaperGuardian -
'heart bound to heart'
Breathless!


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Denise
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4 posted 1999-12-08 11:57 PM


So lovely, paperguardian. Beautifully done! Welcome to Passions! You're gonna love it here!  

 Denise



Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
5 posted 1999-12-09 12:06 PM


Gee, this is the second poem of yours I've read..and you know what! This one's as good as the first! I like it! Make yourself at home, hope you plan to stay awhile!  

Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15
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Sitting in Michael's Lap
6 posted 1999-12-09 12:14 PM


Lines seven and eight were my favorites, but the whole thing was well done.  Here's to the dream, indeed.

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.



hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
7 posted 1999-12-09 12:25 PM


Beautiful  
paperguardian
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since 1999-12-07
Posts 25

8 posted 1999-12-09 07:17 AM


Thanks to everyone!  
Seaangel- the luck is well received, I need it for this dream!
WhtDove- Thanks for the welcome and the luck!
Marge and dsnyder- glad you liked it and thanks for such a warm welcome!
Poet deVine- I think I'll settle in- I really love it here!  
Skyfyre- I liked those two lines the best too!  
hoot_owl_rn-thanks for the praise!

Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
9 posted 1999-12-09 08:10 AM


This piece is simply Wonderful Paperguardian....
Welcome to Passions!!

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!



FreeByrd
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since 1999-11-03
Posts 267

10 posted 1999-12-20 03:22 PM


Here's to the dream,
and here's to the chance

I'm a dreamer and a risk taker. With lines like this you will always be able to reel me in for a read.

Nicely done PG. Liked... Alot...  

 There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief

There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief

- Hendrix



samsonheart
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since 1999-12-20
Posts 72
Missouri rez.
11 posted 1999-12-20 06:15 PM


What a wonderful talent you have, I hope to read much more from you, I really enjoyed this one.

samsonheart

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
12 posted 1999-12-20 06:22 PM


Paperguardian,
Excellent last stanza and poem.

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
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Pennsylvania
13 posted 1999-12-20 06:29 PM


Yes, I agree with Sy, The last verse is beautiful!
Great poem!
Liz

Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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California
14 posted 1999-12-21 10:52 AM


This is a beautiful poem--very well written from beginning to end.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

starboards
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since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
15 posted 1999-12-21 11:48 AM


I have to agree with everyone...great poem even if it is your secound...i'm willing to read more, so please dont stop posting...

Starboards

 
"I wont look back, I wont regret, though it hurts like hell someday I will forget"

passing shadows
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displaced
16 posted 2005-04-15 05:43 AM


great write!
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
17 posted 2007-11-12 06:49 PM


enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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