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paperguardian Junior Member
since 1999-12-07
Posts 25 |
If I could, dare seize the pain see its rearing head and never flinch extract it, show you how on the grander side of nothing aches a throbbing something I wouldn't. It is hope, the terrifying inspiration whispering a poison promise of tomorrow, already breathing, bearing emptiness that I will measure out in one life. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sometimes we take life one day at a time... other times, we must use smaller measures. I like your thoughts on pain and hope. *S* Welcome to Passions!!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Paper If I could I wouldn't If I wouldn't I could. I think I understood. Enjoyed the read. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Much food for thought here.. HUGS< !signature--> Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream... [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 12-08-1999).] |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
like this too, very well done, welcome  |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
I'm going to go WAY out here and ask if the way you present this is to represent a snake? (or something close to that.) I've been trying to connect the two...the "siezing pain, the rearing head, never flinch,poison" etc... Am I way off? |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Very good, my friend. . . welcome. . .perhaps you should also look at Dark Passions. . . some of your writing may fit with that also. . . Very well done. . . I like the use of spacing. . .gives an impression. . . That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Welcome to Passions!  Excellent verse here. Love the format. |
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paperguardian Junior Member
since 1999-12-07
Posts 25 |
Thanks for your comments and encouragement! You guys sure make people feel welcome! Its great to have someone to share with... glad people finally understood my ramblings! Sally S.--- you are right.. the snake idea is there! (just not as effective in the format )Sven ---- Thanks - I'll check out Dark Passions! Everyone - Thanks again for the encouragement! Glad to be here and have the opportunity to read your work and share some of mine! |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Welcome to passions. Great poem and I love the way you used the format of a snake to go along with it. Once again, welcome! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! Quite an impressive entrance! I look forward to reading more from you!  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done, paperguardian! Very original format! Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I picked that up, the way you made the words slither around like a snake would do. Very unique. I liked this! And Welcome! |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
PG, Like this piece very much. Well written. This one belongs over in Dark Passions. Stop over and take a look sometime. Looking forward to more. -RS There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief - Hendrix |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Welcome to passions |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Hey, I like your work very much! Quite talented you are! Liz |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Excellent! Welcome to Passions! It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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