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Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 1999-12-06 10:02 AM


Candles Flicker

Mind churning in speculation
doubts forming into life
candles flicker
the eye of truth
woven intricately
through the flame.

Trace the hidden, lurking shadows
in a paint by number scheme
slowly energize
the morning
by connecting
to the light.


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Seaangel
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1 posted 1999-12-06 02:52 PM


I love how you've pared the idea down its very bones. Candles, light, morning, all are significant things aren't they.  
I do wonder if there's anything specific about 'the light' ? or is this a general good term? Very interested to know.

Seaangel
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2 posted 1999-12-06 05:50 PM


don't want to let this slip away..

[This message has been edited by Seaangel (edited 12-06-1999).]

Lost Dreamer
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3 posted 1999-12-06 05:55 PM


Seaangel:Thanks for reading and yes there all related. The light at the end was cause it brought in a positive reflection so I guess it would be considered general. Thanks again I appreciate much.
Andrew Scott
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4 posted 1999-12-06 05:58 PM


Hey LD: Liked the depth within the simplicity of this one. Well done!
Pepper
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5 posted 1999-12-06 06:12 PM


This is so beautifully written Lost Dreamer...

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!



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6 posted 1999-12-06 09:54 PM


Wow...need I say another word?
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7 posted 1999-12-06 11:30 PM


This is very pretty, LostDreamer.
Methinks I like it. I do.


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Denise
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8 posted 1999-12-06 11:40 PM


Beautiful light, Gloria! Very lovely!  

 Denise



Lost Dreamer
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9 posted 1999-12-10 07:59 AM


My Thanks to all of you, I appreciate your kindness.
Betty Gravitt
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10 posted 1999-12-10 08:49 AM


I liked the light Lost Dreamer.

 B Gravitt



Nan
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11 posted 1999-12-10 06:20 PM


Free verse definitely becomes you, LD.... Hey - Nice pic... Ya think???..
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