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Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
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Canyon Country, CA

0 posted 1999-12-06 02:08 AM


First off I just have to say that I did this in like 10 minutes about 5 hours after I got home from the hospital full of meds.  So it isnt too great.  And it is a bit different, but thats only because I am also     Tell me what you think....and dont try to sing it, it doest quite work that way LoL


On the first day of Christmas
my true love...wait a minute
he was supposed to give me...
boy, he's gonna get it

On the second day of Christmas
my true love finally called
said he needed a ride
cause his brand new Z3 stalled

On the third day of Christmas
my true love came over
it was a miracle I swear
that he was actually sober

On the fourth day of Christmas
my true love gave to me
yeah he finally gave me something
a headache and a pepsi

On the fifth day of Christmas
my true love...I'm beginning to wonder here
I never pictured a true love like this
I'm taking away all his beer

On the sixth day of Christmas
I smacked him across the face
HEY, I had to do something
he was way far out of place

On the seventh day of Christmas
that jerk made me so mad
what on earth did I do wrong?
I gave him all I had

On the eighth day of Christmas
my 'true love' still didn't have a clue
maybe he's not my true love after all
what do you think I should do?

On the ninth day of Christmas
I told my true love how I felt
there it was laid out in front
the winning hand was dealt

On the tenth day of Christmas
I finally had enough
I told him to get out
and packed up all his stuff

On the eleventh day of Christmas
my true love finally saw
how much that he was doing wrong
when I laid down the law

On the twelfth day of Christmas
my true love gave to me
12 long stem roses
and a giant stuffed Monkey

*note...this is not a true story, this in no way reflects my true love (accept the twelfth day)     
SOOOOOOO what did ya think??


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 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns.  But a place of torment because the light of God is gone.  To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~




[This message has been edited by Echo Rhayne (edited 12-06-1999).]

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PhaerieChild
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since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
1 posted 1999-12-06 04:47 AM


Echo, I thought this was hilarious!! I loved every word. Hope you have real happy holidays this season and he gave you a monkey? I love it!!

 If you love me like music, I'll be your song.
~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho



Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
2 posted 1999-12-06 10:06 AM


LOL....
Love your humor in this piece Echo!!


 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!



WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
3 posted 1999-12-06 10:36 AM


See, I told ya so!     I got a kick out of it too. It is different and humorous. And that's a good thing!

 <*\\\><
Jesus is the reason for the season


Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
4 posted 1999-12-06 02:11 PM


Thanks WildChild and pepper!

Yeah ok you told me Rebecca....rub it in, rub it in   j/k

 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~



Terrina Kethryveris
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since 1999-12-06
Posts 53
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5 posted 1999-12-06 03:02 PM


Far be it for me to complain...If I can catch my breath long enough to make this statement...But it seems you for the tenth day any reason? Or maybe it was on the tenth day he was passsed out on the couch?  

LOL...This is truly great. Loved it!

Terri


 Truth be known, fantasy is much more appealing than reality.

Ohme
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since 1999-07-17
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Texas
6 posted 1999-12-06 03:33 PM


I think it's cute. I enjoyed it!
Echo Rhayne
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Canyon Country, CA
7 posted 1999-12-06 04:35 PM


Terri...LoL, sorry, I added it in.  Thanks for pointing it out!  

Thank you kindly ohme!  

 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~



Balladeer
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8 posted 1999-12-06 04:49 PM


There's nothing like improvising and creating to make something great. Great wit and good 'thinking on your feet' poetry here, Echo.
Echo Rhayne
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Canyon Country, CA
9 posted 1999-12-06 05:30 PM


Thanks Balladeer...I do try, sometimes (this wasn't one of them LoL)...Thanks for reading and responding!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~



Denise
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10 posted 1999-12-06 10:16 PM


I thought this was hillarious too! Very fun read!

 Denise



Echo Rhayne
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Canyon Country, CA
11 posted 1999-12-07 03:10 AM


Thanks Denise!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~



Temptress
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since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL
12 posted 1999-12-07 03:21 AM


It was delightful to open this forum after so long of being wary of it, and find something as delightful as this. Thanks for the cheer. This will definetely help my holiday along. LOL!  Of course I do mean the the whole idea not the unfortunate *wink* situation was delightful.
Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
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Canyon Country, CA
13 posted 1999-12-07 03:23 AM


hehe thanks Temptress!  Welcome back!

 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~



Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

14 posted 1999-12-07 03:52 AM


Hey Echo I thought this was kewl, well done!  


 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
15 posted 1999-12-07 03:54 AM


Thank you kinldy WildChild...

I am glad everyone is liking this  

 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~



RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
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16 posted 1999-12-07 08:06 AM


Echo:  I love to read the ones that make me laugh and yours certainly did..

HUGS

 Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...



Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
17 posted 1999-12-07 05:08 PM


I think thats what I was going for (the laugh) so I am glad its workin.  Thanks!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~



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