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12 Days of Christmas (WhtDove's challenge)
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12 Days of Christmas (WhtDove's challenge) |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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First off I just have to say that I did this in like 10 minutes about 5 hours after I got home from the hospital full of meds. So it isnt too great. And it is a bit different, but thats only because I am also < !signature--> Tell me what you think....and dont try to sing it, it doest quite work that way LoLOn the first day of Christmas my true love...wait a minute he was supposed to give me... boy, he's gonna get it On the second day of Christmas my true love finally called said he needed a ride cause his brand new Z3 stalled On the third day of Christmas my true love came over it was a miracle I swear that he was actually sober On the fourth day of Christmas my true love gave to me yeah he finally gave me something a headache and a pepsi On the fifth day of Christmas my true love...I'm beginning to wonder here I never pictured a true love like this I'm taking away all his beer On the sixth day of Christmas I smacked him across the face HEY, I had to do something he was way far out of place On the seventh day of Christmas that jerk made me so mad what on earth did I do wrong? I gave him all I had On the eighth day of Christmas my 'true love' still didn't have a clue maybe he's not my true love after all what do you think I should do? On the ninth day of Christmas I told my true love how I felt there it was laid out in front the winning hand was dealt On the tenth day of Christmas I finally had enough I told him to get out and packed up all his stuff On the eleventh day of Christmas my true love finally saw how much that he was doing wrong when I laid down the law On the twelfth day of Christmas my true love gave to me 12 long stem roses and a giant stuffed Monkey *note...this is not a true story, this in no way reflects my true love (accept the twelfth day) SOOOOOOO what did ya think?? ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ [This message has been edited by Echo Rhayne (edited 12-06-1999).] |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Echo, I thought this was hilarious!! I loved every word. Hope you have real happy holidays this season and he gave you a monkey? I love it!! If you love me like music, I'll be your song. ~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
LOL.... Love your humor in this piece Echo!! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
See, I told ya so!  I got a kick out of it too. It is different and humorous. And that's a good thing!<*\\\>< Jesus is the reason for the season |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thanks WildChild and pepper! Yeah ok you told me Rebecca....rub it in, rub it in j/k~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Terrina Kethryveris Member
since 1999-12-06
Posts 53USA |
Far be it for me to complain...If I can catch my breath long enough to make this statement...But it seems you for the tenth day any reason? Or maybe it was on the tenth day he was passsed out on the couch? LOL...This is truly great. Loved it! Terri Truth be known, fantasy is much more appealing than reality. |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
I think it's cute. I enjoyed it! |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Terri...LoL, sorry, I added it in. Thanks for pointing it out! Thank you kindly ohme! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
There's nothing like improvising and creating to make something great. Great wit and good 'thinking on your feet' poetry here, Echo. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thanks Balladeer...I do try, sometimes (this wasn't one of them LoL)...Thanks for reading and responding! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I thought this was hillarious too! Very fun read! Denise |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thanks Denise! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
It was delightful to open this forum after so long of being wary of it, and find something as delightful as this. Thanks for the cheer. This will definetely help my holiday along. LOL! Of course I do mean the the whole idea not the unfortunate *wink* situation was delightful. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
hehe thanks Temptress! Welcome back! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Echo I thought this was kewl, well done! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thank you kinldy WildChild... I am glad everyone is liking this ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Echo: I love to read the ones that make me laugh and yours certainly did.. HUGS Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream... |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
I think thats what I was going for (the laugh) so I am glad its workin. Thanks! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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