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Open Poetry #4

Bottled Dreams

RobertB
Senior Member

since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

0 posted 1999-12-02 11:40 PM

Bottled Dreams

In a life of turmoil
from day one and through
the struggle on the soil
in the mind of a youth
not asking a change of circumstances
only for the door of opportunity
not necessarily second chances
just a semblance of normalcy
in a world that offers
excesses by the carton load
from venders opening coffers
selling maps to a life on the wrong road
and promises of dreams succumbed
to the last drop at the bottom of a bottle
for an intellect so numbed
by life at Wide Open Throttle
and no brakes.

RB

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite

since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

1 posted 1999-12-03 12:10 PM

Ooohh, I liked this! What a powerful message too! The title is what caught my eye.....very thought provoking - - thank you for sharing!! I liked this alot.

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~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

2 posted 1999-12-03 06:59 AM

Excellent - gripping actually.

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 1999-12-03 07:04 AM

I personally like the line about "selling maps to life on the wrong road...".... How very true....

Ohme
Senior Member

since 1999-07-17

Posts 816
Texas

4 posted 1999-12-03 11:05 AM

Oh, I like this a lot. Favorite line;

selling maps to a life on the wrong road.

Very well done!

RobertB
Senior Member

since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

5 posted 1999-12-03 12:09 PM

wow....you guys make me think....how to do it again...I really appreciate all your kind comments!!

Robert

U K Hero
Member

since 1999-08-08

Posts 266
England

6 posted 1999-12-03 01:40 PM

A lot of effort in this one Robert....liked.

RobertB
Senior Member

since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

7 posted 1999-12-03 06:38 PM

thanks UK....it was from a true life experience. :-}

[This message has been edited by RobertB (edited 12-03-1999).]

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