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RobertB
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

0 posted 1999-12-02 11:40 PM


Bottled Dreams


In a life of turmoil
from day one and through
the struggle on the soil
in the mind of a youth
not asking a change of circumstances
only for the door of opportunity
not necessarily second chances
just a semblance of normalcy
in a world that offers
excesses by the carton load
from venders opening coffers
selling maps to a life on the wrong road
and promises of dreams succumbed
to the last drop at the bottom of a bottle
for an intellect so numbed
by life at Wide Open Throttle
and no brakes.

RB

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poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
1 posted 1999-12-03 12:10 PM


Ooohh, I liked this! What a powerful message too! The title is what caught my eye.....very thought provoking - - thank you for sharing!! I liked this alot.

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Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

2 posted 1999-12-03 06:59 AM


Excellent - gripping actually.
Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
3 posted 1999-12-03 07:04 AM


I personally like the line about "selling maps to life on the wrong road...".... How very true....
Ohme
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 816
Texas
4 posted 1999-12-03 11:05 AM


Oh, I like this a lot. Favorite line;


selling maps to a life on the wrong road.

Very well done!

RobertB
Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104
Champaign, IL
5 posted 1999-12-03 12:09 PM


wow....you guys make me think....how to do it again...I really appreciate all your kind comments!!

Robert

U K Hero
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since 1999-08-08
Posts 266
England
6 posted 1999-12-03 01:40 PM


A lot of effort in this one Robert....liked.
RobertB
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104
Champaign, IL
7 posted 1999-12-03 06:38 PM


thanks UK....it was from a true life experience. :-}

[This message has been edited by RobertB (edited 12-03-1999).]

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