Open Poetry #4 |
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When I am gone.... |
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Balladeer
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When I am gone and not around I want no mound to mark the ground where I lay still but let me be alive and well in memories of those I touched and knew me well my wish is such a place to dwell and let them feel me in the breeze that keys the move- ment of the trees and let me rest in Waldon's Pond then to the stars and far beyond I'll be a part of nature's plan inside the heart of every man and let them see me in the eyes of lovers' glee and baby's cries for I will be in all these things in rains that fall in birds that sing and this will be my epitaph 'he laughed to live and lived to laugh and laughed at life he never dropped until the day the laughter stopped' then I will rest a restful sleep I did my best now trust my keep to He above who shows the way to endless love for this I pray. |
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Elizabeth![]() ![]()
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Posts 6871Minnesota |
Makes for both a good poem and a good prayer, Balladeer. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
BEAUTIFUL POEM!! IT'S WONDERFUL! AS ARE YOUR TALENTS liz |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Well we already feel you in the breeze of your words! Was beautiful Balladeer! Really beautiful! |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas |
Beautiful, my friend. A whole new dimension hitherto unexpected. |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh, I like this...a departure from what you usually write...I love the format and the way it flowed from line to line, stanza to stanza! ![]() |
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Martie
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Posts 28049California |
This is beautiful. The bard, the balladeer, lives on in hearts, his words told and told again, an echo of the past into the future. |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sweet Balladeer - Your laughter will be heard on the winds of sweet memories. This is really very sentimentally beautiful. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
My friends, I thank you for your wonderful thoughts.....I appreciate you all. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Applauds!!! wonderful Balladeer, this is so smooth it practically reads itself. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
dear 'deer - we're all going to Poet Heaven you know... ![]() I have to agree with PdV and Ruth - it's one of those poems that has written itself. Bravo - many roses etc. K |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
And when I stand, At your graveside, I'll think of you, then fertilize, The flowers above, From where you lay, Cuz Toerag will follow ya, to the grave! Okay, seriously, this was a very well done poem Balladeer...and you'll be remembered when you're gone I'm sure....(Like now? I'm always thinking of something I can say about ya?) [This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 12-02-1999).] |
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Nan
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Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
M&M - I have only these words for you - from my Great-Grammie McGraw - Alice K Martin (1878-1967) When I have left this mortal shore And mosey 'round the earth no more, Don't cry, don't weep, don't sob ~ I may have struck a better job. Don't go and buy a large bouquet For which you find it hard to pay. If you have roses, well, bless your soul Just pin one in my button-hole While I am here and well today. Don't wait until I've gone away. |
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sraet Junior Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 31 |
As always, I loved your post. Sentiments so many of us can relate to, definitely the way I would like to be remembered... |
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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
MM, you will live on in the hearts of all of us! Now stop making me cry at work! |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Because of you, and in memory of you, when it's time, we will all dance... Marvelous, as always, Sir 'Deer. ------------------ Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
You never fail to touch me deeply with your words. Even though I don't know you very well, your words will always stay with me. Great poem. ------------------ If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~ |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
I've no doubt that you will be treasured and felt inside the hearts of the many you have touched with you kindness and sincerity. Your words will last long after we've become one with nature. Though, I hope you're not planing on leaving me for quite some time. Sad, touching poem, my dear... |
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Denise
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This is beautiful, Balladeer. It is a lovely poem and prayer. Well done. ------------------ Denise |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Bal: Wonderful as always.. ![]() HUSG ------------------ Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream... |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Let's hope it'll be a long, long time before you need an epitaph, 'Deer one... Great poem! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
You will be remembered well my friend. I echo suthern. I hope you don't need these words for a very long time! |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
Mr. Balladeer you have gained a special place in my memory and in my heart for writing such wonderful poems as this ![]() ![]() |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Not that my opinion means much...but, you're right Lovey and the rest of you....I can't imagine this place with out this man. He's kind of an icon here...I love to tease and bother him.....(and Longjohn), but he's gone off into never never y2k land, but there's few people on this earth that can reach into the depths of someone's heart..into their very soul like this guy can.....But, I kinda think he'll be around for quite sometime however....long after I'm dead and gone anyhow.....(which, with my temperment and mouth could be as soon as tomorrow), but, he'll be killin' roaches and makin' rhymes for a long long time me thinks...I will miss him, and all the rest of the crazies here....I just hope one of his employees doesn't mistake him for a palmetto bug and sprays the hell outta him....(I have heard he's been spotted in a few roach hotels however)...Or was that Roach infested hotels?....(Where he probably has the contract).....Yall be good to him now ya hear? He's really a pretty good old (very old) punkster.. yanno....despite what nature's done to him....... [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 12-02-1999).] |
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Nan
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Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Did I happen to mention that I like the poem, Deer? |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
NAN...LOL..."Punkster?".....What the hell's a punkster?.....Sorry....just being a Toerag I reckon....G'nite yall... |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Again I thak you all. I appreciate every comment, yes, even yours, reprobate. Don't even ask, Toe. Just look it up. LOL! |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Balladeer, I don't know you well at all but I do very much enjoy your lyrical talent and I know that you will not be forgotten. The memory of you shall always linger in my mind even without the picture posted over yonder. You know where I mean LOL ------------------ If you love me like music, I'll be your song. ~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Shawna, you mean the one putting my best, er, foot forward? ROFL! Thank you for the kind words. |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Roflmbo...I wasn't quite thinkin' of your foot (giggles hysterically) but yep that's the one!! LOL ------------------ If you love me like music, I'll be your song. ~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Betty Gravitt Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 222Georgia United States |
Balladeer, there is nothing left for us to say. Your words say it all. Beautiful. |
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