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What Was I Thinking?
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What Was I Thinking? |
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Poetess099 Junior Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 15Alabama |
I am the shell of the person I used to be. I’m numb. I’m scared. I’m lost. I don’t have a clue where I’m going, but I can’t forget where I’ve been. I can’t help but be convinced that it’s me. What’s wrong with me? What did I do that was so wrong? Maybe it was the unconditional love that I offered to you. I can see where that would make anyone a horrible person. Perhaps it was the honesty that I gave you. Heaven forbid I tell you how I really feel. Maybe, just maybe, it was the fact that I longed to devote my life to you. Yeah, that could be it. What a terrible thing for someone to want to give another their life. So where else did I go wrong? Supporting you in everything you pursued? What was I thinking?!? Hanging onto your every word and adoring you? Man, I have some nerve. No...I know what it was now..... Meeting you. Falling for you. Loving you. Needing you. Wanting you. Letting you get to me. Wasting your precious time on such frivolous and petty things. I really don’t know how I could put you through so much agony. I mean, I can’t even begin to comprehend what it must have been like to have been so loved. Good think you never really loved me back, huh? I would hate to think you were capable of making such a mistake. Seeing how perfect you already are. Wow, this had truly been an eye opening experience. Thank you so much for letting me see the real you, and for letting me see what I’m capable of doing. I guess I’ve made you a victim long enough... better move onto my next prey. Just do me one favor before I go, ok? You keep doing what you’re doing. Keep being the person that you are now. Because I know, if you do, in time... You’ll get exactly what you deserve. And you know, that’s all I really want for you. For you to get every single thing that you deserve in life. And I hope I’m there to see when it finally happens. Because God knows I’ve waited forever. ------------------ Melissa |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Mellisa, Very nicely written poem. Lots of emotions there. It looks like a classical case of unmutual attraction. I wrote a poem about that one time it was titled "It Takes Two Baby". The last line and also my reflection on relationships was "It takes two baby so don't give so freely to those who don't want to receive." I wrote this shortly after another failed relationship. Then after some reflections on what I had done wrong I wrote a new poem after my friend Mich challenged me to live in the moment. Here it is and this will be my goal for the rest of my life. Life Is a Challenge Life shouldn't be about hurt and pain. It should be about acceptance and change. Living in this moment and always having hope. Because this is life's challenge and this is so fabulous and true. Your goal is to meet someone Special that will feel the same Love for you. James |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Melissa, this is well written. Excellent tongue in cheek and a tinge of sarcasm expertly aimed. To the world you might be just one person but to one person you might just be the world. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, Melissa, this is excellent! Very well done!  Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Poetess099 - You just go girl ! ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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paperguardian Junior Member
since 1999-12-07
Posts 25 |
Yeah! This would be tempting to send to a lot of guys I know - LOL! Perfect sarcasm and I like the way you interspersed questions with those biting statements! |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Great poem Melissa. Loved the sarcasm. If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~ |
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