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The Creeper
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The Creeper |
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brandondinsmore Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 142OKC, OK |
The Creeper he's creeping creeping slowly through your body down your spine he knows you like no other and he'll use you for his own he's the creeper he's a creep I"M not creeping in your sleep you're the creeper creeping gently you're persuasive entangling me... What do you people think? I'm very interested i your opinions... ------------------ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Hmmm....this one makes me sit here awhile wondering what you are talking about!  It was indeed very unusual....but I liked it ! Give us some insight if you will.....sounds like a drug...??? |
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brandondinsmore Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 142OKC, OK |
Thanks for the comment. You see, I am friends with this girl, and she was hurt extremely bad by a guy, and he used her (I think) for sex. He creeped around, doing nice things only when he wanted sex. She was hurt, and now... It's kind of like SHE'S creeping, but in a good way, she's wooing me, if you will, and I'm confused... Do I make any sense? I have many more poems on this subject that I am still cotemplating whether or not to post. Feedback???? |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh don't be confused! It sounds like she likes you!! And I too can relate to someone "creeping"....please feel free to post more! I see you're a new member, and sometimes it takes awhile for people to get to know you and your poetry....the more you share, the better we can get to know you! Once people learn that they like your work, they will make it a point to read most everything you post! Be patient, and definately keep writing and sharing! I'll be waiting for another one from you!  ------------------ ~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
What Femme said is true Brandon - it happens to all! Like this - usually repetition can be offputting, but it works well here - forming the focus for the poem.  K |
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