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The Mountain |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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The mountain stood within my sight With jagged peaks that reached so high They hid the twinkling stars at night Embedded in the summer sky. And, high upon the mountain's face Clear waterfalls cascaded down The side until they reached the base To water fruit trees in the ground. So held in awe, so struck was I By this stone monument I spied I bid my hill a fond farewell And journeyed to the mountain's side. But, as I stood there at the base, The mountain did not seem so high It's trees were barren, void of fruit And water falls ran dry. Then, as I stared into the nigh Across the lonesome valley floor, A mountain stood within my sight... The hill I'd known before. Now, sitting on that valley floor, I am forced to pay the cost For the hill that I thought mountainous And the mountain that I lost. |
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Kelly Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 145 |
Simply beautiful. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer, this is lovely. Reminds me of the greener pastuures we all wish to graze in, then find barren and brown when we venture over. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Balladeer, Very fine work here again, as always...(Please note there is not a single "cut" or "put down" associated with this response to this fine poet)...... [This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 11-11-1999).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
There are 2 names I can see in the list and know there's a treat waiting just a click away... Neither have ever disappointed... Yours is one, Balladeer... Wonderful poem... as always! *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, So that old proverb about the greener grass is not true. Excellent as usual. |
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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
Again, you have done it again! You are fast climbing my all time favorite "reads" list! Wonderful poem. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I think this is wonderful! And a lesson snuck in there also.  |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Wonderful poem and message 'Deer..... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Great work, 'Deer, but please tell me, was this a repost? I thought I had read this before...but I could be wrong. I just don't want to think I'm suffering from early stages of senility. ------------------ Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wonderful as always my friend. Your talent shines through like the suns rays through the clouds.  Ruth ------------------ Alis volat propriis (She flies with her own wings) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Simply beautiful and I like the philosophy. |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Balladeer, Excellent as always. Very unique perspective. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I'm running out of words, so for once I say it in Dutch. ; ) Een buitengewoon goed gedicht ! ; ) |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Great poem, 'Deer. It's always a pleasure reading you work. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Bal: What can I say that hasn't already been said...I'm glad the words came back.. HUSG ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Sir Balladeer: Shadows of F1... I believe this was one of my earlier introductions to your work, a piece that begged me to seek out more of your fine poetry. Always a pleasure to read. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
My warm thanks to you all. Toerag, it has been duly noted. One thing that separates great witty people and others is knowing when to use it. You excel in that which makes you a real class act. LongJohn, you're right there with him. Sunshine and Andrew, yep, shades of the very early days of Open #1. Thank you for remembering. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Gorgeous my friend. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
very good!! I am in awe of your use of such meter and rhyme. I used to do it that way so long ago...but abandoned it for the easy way!!! RB ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
It's quite true, never a disappointment when your name is attached! Loved it!------------------ Denise |
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H. Arlequin Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 210 |
Denise got it right!! wd HA |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This remains as beautiful as when you wrote it. Alison PS - yes, I am avoiding my lessons tonight. It's too hard (laughs). I'll work on it tomorrow. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you, Alison.. Yes, I know it is. The reward is in the effort and you are never short on that. Good luck! |
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