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It really wasn't long ago....
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It really wasn't long ago.... |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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More bright, by far, we knew we were Than generations past All times before us but a blur Dark ages gone at last. We simply were superior How could one not agree Minds prior just inferior World's saviour we would be. Fine words we spoke, pure gems of gold Were treasures to be sure Discarding tarnished trinkets old We stomped them on the floor. Invented peace and love, you know To justice we gave birth It wasn't all that long ago Our truth would save the earth. The lessons found in joy and strife Can teach us many things Time's classroom that is known as life Humility it brings. Experience bestowed its touch Here's wisdom youth can glean I didn't really know so much ...When I was seventeen. (made a few changes and added a stanza) ------------------ Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 11-11-1999).] [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 11-11-1999).] [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 11-12-1999).] [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 11-13-1999).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Wasn't it only last year???  Yep, things have changed since we were that age alright (SIGH). Great piece Denise ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Wasn't it only last year??? Yep, things have changed since we were that age alright (SIGH). Great piece Denise ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
For me it's only going to be next year... (sigh)! Great poem as always! Love the meter and rhyme! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
sheesh... talk about giving someone mid-life crisis... yep... that was us.. save the world... we did a great job didnt we... excellent poem as usual Denise... |
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jenmarie Junior Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 27 |
great poem - very much enjoyed - seventeen was my favorite year which is not saying much since it was only three and a half years ago - but i loved it |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Denise....Wonderful, as always. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Hey, It was just last year for me ;-) ------------------ Alis volat propriis (She flies with her own wings) |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Nice job Denise. I can't even remember seventeen. Really well crafted and entertaining. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
O my, now I really feel old ! ; ) Great poem Denise. : ) |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Isis- yep it was just last year!  Master- enjoy it, it goes fast! Mike- yep, we did a great job didn't we? Jenmarie- read the comment to Master! Lynn- Thanks! Hoot- Wow, you've accomplished a lot in your short lifetime! Fred- I don't remember it either, I was just making it all up! Munda- You and me both! Thanks everybody for reading and commenting! ------------------ Denise |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I made lots and lots of changes to this and I wanted to know what you all thought. Thanks! ------------------ Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 11-12-1999).] |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
LOved it Denise....ummmm how old are you. how much do you weigh and how much do you make a year?? ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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hehehehe....you are so funny Robert! hmmmmm...let's see: 1) Not as young as I used to be. 2) Fluctuates, but hubby loves me anyway! 3) Is it ever enough?! Thanks for the kind comment! I'm glad you liked it! ------------------ Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 11-13-1999).] |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Very nice, Denise. ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
At seventeen we could do anything...even change the world Now I'm just busy changing my hair from gray to...uh..well whatever color is catchin' my eye this time !!Great one Denise, as always! ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Loved the poem, Denise. When I was 17 I thought I could whip the world with a broom straw. Now need broom straw to clean up the messes I've made. LOL ------------------ I look forward to tomorrow, while looking back on the past. But today is the day I am living. And I expect it to be a great day! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Denise .. a memory-shaker for sure. At seventeen ... I couldn't wait to be twenty-two. And now ... I wonder where all those challenges went and if I met them ... and if I'd remember anyway ! ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Denise....nicely done...Being almost 18 now, I can relate to this very well.....LOL |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Seventeen, yup, I think I was there once, let me get out my calculator. At seventeen I had to do all my counting on my fingers. Great poem Denise! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Geesh! I feel like such an ole geezer now... being almost 29. *G* Great poem!! |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sys- Thanks! Caroline- Yep, we sure thought we could! Ohme- Me too! Marge- Me too! Toerag-Say what?! Martie- Thanks! Suthern- 29? Thanks, now I really feel old! Thanks for all your lovely comments! ------------------ Denise |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
I loved this Denise. You did well at capturing the feeling of invincibility that runs rampant in teens! I'm 25 now. The other night I was fondly looking back to my teenage years when I wanted to make a difference in the world. Luckily, I have a job that allows me to do that with the teens I now work with. Great job! |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thanks, Tara! Geesh, 25! Am I the oldest person around this neck of the woods?! I'm glad you liked it! ------------------ Denise |
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H. Arlequin Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 210 |
HA applauds! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Hmmn, I think I'm holding at that age for the rest of time! LOL...wouldn't it be nice. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
d. I am humbled by your eloquence and the truth that your words bring . Were mine half well as spoken then bells would likely ring . |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hehehe..... This makes me wonder, yet again, what I want to be when I grow up!! |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you all for your warm and kind comments! H.A. - smoooooches! WhtDove- Wouldn't that be great! Dr.Moose-You are too kind, I thank you! Nan- Really? ME TOO! ------------------ Denise |
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