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A Fleeting Moment
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A Fleeting Moment |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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A Fleeting Moment A moment passes in the life Of endless joy and endless strife The water pours from life's own font And happens at the edge of want The moment flies with tropic breeze And leaves the soul upon its knees It cuts the air with every breath Bleeds heart's content until the death A moment fast, a moment swift Through heaven's place to always drift A faceless face, a nameless name But life would never be the same Elizabeth Santos |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, This poem is like a sip Of tears upon a lip. It is beyond the word of sad Even to a Galahad. It strips you down in naked tide, And leaves you of no place hide. It is a message so true. And there's nothing you can do. Exquisite. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, This poem could be of anything Of any one, of any place Sometimes least expecting it Grief just looks you in the face For my account the verse above Refers to that most precious love It came so fast, and such it went And left my heart forever bent Elizabeth |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Elizabeth, this is so well done. I love it. Seymour, I love yours as well. ------------------ Lorene Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me, it will beat the heck out of day before yesterday! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Ohme, Seymours answers are always so much more eloquent than the original poems Thank you for your comments Elizabeth |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, I can relate to those fleeting moments, alright! Well done, Elizabeth! And you too, Seymour!  ------------------ Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lizz, Your rhyming is magnificent It flies and flies without decent. I wonder how you stay awake, And do you ever take a break? |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow - this is lovely, and so are Sy's replies. |
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