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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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Didactic is defined as" conveying instruction: teaching some moral lesson. Moral, which originally meant merely "customary", has grown to involve the distinction between what is right and what is wrong. This is a subjective distinction, and each person developes his or her own code, developed by the interaction of his own teachings and his own desires. Thus the "moral" which constitutes the poem or verses, or which is emphasized in them, will be what the poet wants the reader to learn and believe and follow. Some examples of didactic poetry... "Lives of great men all remind us We can make our lives sublime, And, departing, leave behind us Footprints on the sands of time; Footprints that perhaps another Sailing o'er life's solemn main, A forlorn and shipwrecked brother Seeing, shall take heart again. - Longfellow (A Psalm of Life) Alcohol is like a snake: It can't be kept in bounds; It makes of one a perfect wreck, A wondering vagrant hound. - James Byron Elmore A little learning is a dangerous thing; Drink deep, or taste not the Pierian spring. There shallow draughts intoxicate the brain And drinking largely sobers us again. All seems infected that the infexted spy, And all looks yellow to the jaundiced eye. - Alexander Pope (Essay on Criticism) So what bit of wisdom would you like to impart to your fellow pipsters? What moral lesson would you like to deliver? Teach us!!!! As always, use any style but remain true to that style with proper construction. (no, Dr. Moose, you CANNOT use "a waist is a terrible thing to mind".  ) |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Balladeer, A challenging assignment, I thought about this for a couple days before it hit me how I might be able work this assignment and still maintain humorous content. True life often works best. Doc Quite a long time ago was a buddy of mine seemed to get himself shot where the sun doesn't shine Through a window he fled from a mans' jealous rage but not quickly enough for that ol' shotguns' gauge And the scars are still there deeper than wounded pride so I'm told anyway ( not for me to have eyed!) Yet I'm mindful the same of that lesson in life with no ifs, ands, nor butts 'bout another mans' wife [This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (01-09-2009 11:33 AM).] |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Doc posted his assignment and I just saw the assignment. Sheese, would someone wake me up when the teacher comes in, please? And, Moose Man, I love the poem! A |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Alison, Lol, I was wondering where you were off to. Glad you liked. Doc |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Doc, you belong in the rear of the class....'cause no one writes about rears better than you! Nicely done...and a lesson for us all not to get behind in our endeavors in life. I had a feeling you would get to the bottom of this assignment very easily  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
A Teacher's View I promise not to scold you but in parenting I find that busy ness keeps many from the nurturing in kind. Too many let replacement of... devices in their hold when children really need the touch and limits to help mold. Their future lives depend upon their childhood in support. Rather than mechanical means that leave them falling short. M |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Whethering Heights Whether 'tis or weather 'tisn't there's one thing that I know I try the best to dress for it in rain or in the snow. With all those new found gadgets that can read the skies above why is it that I dress the wrong when listening to terms of... Partly sun or mostly clouds hmmm the days are both the same. Maybe this or it's slightly that... Methinks a whether game! M (this one is probably more of a complaint than a lesson learned that would be moral...but if you live in this area of the states you can expect the wrong weather report most of the time!) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
That was a really cute one Doc~~ M |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Quote from Balladeer! "I'm afraid there is a lack of interest, m'lady" A lack of interest teacher sir isn't exactly what I have It's just that I don't want to look so dense in front of the class As you know I have missed out on a whole lot of the lessons So, when you say apply all, that we have learned in each session I am at a total loss as to what those lessons might have been Since I wasn't in the class each time to know what the lesson was back then If you do recall Dear Sir I never did complete the assignment given Just before Christmas time arrived So, I hope I am forgiven |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Maureen, your Teacher's View is excellent! It is well-written and presents an excellent point. In this day of working mothers and more limited parent-child relations, one must remember the importance of family bonding. Saying, "Here's your Nintendo - go play" does not take the place of parenting. Wish more parents would remember what parenting is really supposed to involve. As far as you other poem, be glad you don't live here. We plan our golf and picnics on the days the weathermen predict 90% rain - because we know it will be bright and sunny! |
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Balladeer
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Rose, you NEVER have to worry about looking dense. You are among FRIENDS!!! I admire any lesson you attempt and I will always be here to help you in any way, as will everyone else. Since you have been here, your poetry has improved greatly and I'm sure it will continue to do so because you are not a quitter and you have a strong desire to do well. Forgive you? I applaud you and will always be in your corner....believe it. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Balledeer, Ty M'friend. Ten years an' I still don't know how to run these things, darn but it's been alot of fun. Doc |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
To challenge myself further, I wrote this with internally-rhyming alexandrines. That's my second attempt at alexandrine couplets, feedback will be greatly appreciated. Thanks for reading, Mark. The Pentateuch spoke wrong: so I address the throng To tell them all’s not done; a sabbath God took none; He’s been here all along, the birds still sing his song In space he’ll be colon, when all of us are gone. “It ended on day six; the plants the dogs the hicks” A lie, to you I say: It still goes on today; Still chromosomes commix, a second he won’t nix As newborns see the day, it’s like that everyday. He still creates right now, he's in each Cupid’s bow Each time you life deface, you’re spitting in God’s face; Whenever you would row, whenever there’s a pow Creation of our race, you bring down to disgrace. And when you save a life, then your rewards be rife For they were made by God, the fly the king the bawd; So do forego all strife, and find yourself a wife In your bed life belaud, and angels shall applaud. |
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Claira Member
since 2008-05-11
Posts 102British but living in Thailand |
Hello Teacher, This is one of the first full poems I've written in about 6 months, so please be gentle  Boundaries in Cambodia I know a man from far away Who thought he’d stay that extra day. That to many, was no surprise But just the start of his demise. The first month he drank only beer, Much stronger here and not so dear. One month on he was gulping gin But that isn't what “done `im in” Progressed to smoking herbal grass, A few tokes here: his life a blast. For him this wasn’t quite enough. As he was feeling way too tough! Then someone said “Ere this is nice” That is the night he first tried Ice. A dirty drug, it must be said, Leaves you ruined; or often dead. Still this fool stayed an extra day! Instead of getting far away. While he was getting in this state, Confirming the future of his own fate. He jumped upon his trusty steed And flipped thru’ gears to gain some speed. I’m sure that you can guess the rest But let’s just say, his head’s a mess. Yeah I know, need to work on the Leaves you ruined or often dead line. Claira [This message has been edited by Claira (01-14-2009 07:51 AM).] |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Claira, I love your poem! A |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Poetic Flatulence If your homework isn’t turned in on time, don’t attempt “the dog ate my poem” whine. You’ll have to wait until your mutt poops and bring in your poem on a pooper scoop. If you are late for your poetry class you’ll have to sit behind the guy with gas. It’s a fact that is proven true you’ll hold your breath ‘til you turn blue. So set your clock early, and get there on time or pray that you won’t be late and get behind that guy with gas. He’ll grin and toot and Balladeer won’t give a hoot! Alison [This message has been edited by Alison (01-15-2009 10:58 AM).] |
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Claira Member
since 2008-05-11
Posts 102British but living in Thailand |
Thanks Alison, loving your poem too, we will have to make sure we both sit at the front of class so Mr Gasman is behind us |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
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Hello, Marc-Andre! Let me say you have really done a brilliant job here. Alexandrines are not the easiest things to do in the world, especiall the internal rhyming and you pulled off the a-a-b-b-a-a-b-b in an excellent manner with perfect meter. Not only that, your message is right on and thoughts to live by. BUT....... Colon threw me off. I had to consult three dictionaries to find the meaning that fits (I think!) I still don't understand the hicks reference, unless you are saying God finished creating southerners on day six! Last line of the second stanza you rhyme day and day The "wherever you would row" threw me also because I naurally used the pronounciation for "row your boat', and got lost when I got to pow. That's a weak line to me. Second to the last line, the "do" is there obviously to maintain that syllable count only. It may sound like I'm picking on you a bit and....and I probably am because I recognize your talent, your hard work and your dedication to your work and I want you to be the best you can be. You have some great potential, sir. |
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Balladeer
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Claira, that was really good! it was original, a good story and with one exception (the last line in the second to last stanza) the rhythm and meter was wonderful. You did an excellent job, miss |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Alison, your poem was a real gas! Some may think it smells but I think it shows great fartitude and the message is perfect.....don't be late for class!!!  No butts about it.... |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Heartfelt thanks to you, Balladeer, for taking the time to write such a thorough feedback. I feel privileged to have you "pick on me," it really helps me to learn. You've got the "hicks" reference right, what I mean to say is that some talk as God's creation was totally completed on day six. Perhaps a bit forced though, I needed the rhyme...As for "colon" I used the same meaning as that of my native tongue, French. I tend to forget that some of those words, while common in French, can be obscure in English, at least semantically-speaking. Your feedback here is invaluable. I don't know whether I will rework that poem though, I am currently working on a piece with the trochaic octometer and the rhyming scheme of Poe's "The Raven", quite demanding but a valuable exercise, I think. Have a marvelous day! Mark |
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Claira Member
since 2008-05-11
Posts 102British but living in Thailand |
Thank you Balladeer, I'm sure I speak for everyone here when I say that your time, help and patience are very much appreciated. I will try and work on the offending line, I'm also not sure if there is maybe more to be done on this one, I think there are a couple more points I could put into the story. Once again many thanks for your help and encouragement.  |
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