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A Christmas Bear Named Rue
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA 
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Upon the shelves of yuletide cheer As Christmas shoppers hustle by, I’ve tried my best to smile this year Yet all I seem to do is cry. Another Christmas Day will see The other teddy bears have gone, All snuggled under festive trees To greet the morning’s mirthful throng. Now “Sunny Bear’s” with little Joy, “Felicity’s” gone home with Grace, And “Chipper Bear” is Johnny’s toy Each child now dons a smiling face Alone I sit, upon the shelf. Last minute shoppers wander by, Yet no one stops – not Santa’s elf. Must be the sadness in my eye. I’m different from the other bears My furry body’s shades of blue I show no twinkling, smiling fair. I am a bear whose name is “Rue” Just then I saw a wistful child He stopped and tugged his mother’s knee. I wondered why he hadn’t smiled, His finger pointed up at me. “Why do you want this saddened bear? His tag says that his name is ‘Rue.’ That’s likely why he’s still up there. He looks so tearful and he’s blue!” The child looked up at Mom and said “He isn’t sad, and he’s not blue. He only seems to be. Instead That kindly teddy bear is true” “He cries his “Rue-ful” tears for me. He takes my sadness as his own. He sets my heavy burdens free. So I can smile as yet unknown.” “We want that little bear called “Rue” Please take him from his lonely stand. He’ll bear our rues and burdens too. A Merry Christmas is at hand!” |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Hiya Nan! I enjoyed this very much. That sad little bear sounds like me. LOL! Hope you had a wonderful Christmas, my friend. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
So what were ya waiting for...Christmas!!!  Excellent poem, nanners. Not only is it clever, there's a lot of wisdom in them thar words. i should get the gold star for getting you off your rumpers to write....but i give it to you. Ya done good  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Getting off my rumpers to give it back.. You get the credit, Deer - you earned it.. Merry Christmas & Happy New Year to you & Frannie..  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
And thankya, Sue - Merry Christmas to you as well..  |
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Justin Genius Member
since 2001-04-02
Posts 85 |
Oh, Miss Nancy, you made me cry! And you know very well Justins DON'T cry, so lets say I had to laugh sooooooo loud tears rolled over my cheeks. I hope your Christmas was as wonderful is mine. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Dear Nan, A poignant story, excellently presented, you do have a gift. Merry Christmas and the best for the new year. Doc |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
i reaally enjoyed your poem. i was in tears as i read it. it reminds me of my teddy bear which was "BLUE". have a wonderful holiday and a happy new year |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
Hi I'm new here and I'm not sure how the workshop works, so I won't say anything. Except that this is Excellent. Very well thought out, with no gaps or jerky movements. It feels natural and not forced in the rhyme. The way to tell if a rhyming poem works is to read it outloud. This one passed the voice test. Cheers |
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