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Marc-Andre
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0 posted 2008-12-23 02:22 AM


I am new here, and I want to catch up with the previous assignments     I find them educative, fun and inspiring     I am particularly interested in poetical drama. I must work on dialogues, and one tool to create dramatic ones is to consider not only what is being said, but how it is being heard by the other party. Provencal poetry seems to be an ideal exercise tool for this. I'm so glad I've joined PiP    


     (Wife speaks to husband)
“I’ve got a headache and it is too late,”
Tonight it seems I’ll have to masturbate.
“The children brought me to exhaustion;”
You did agree to no protection.
“I do the washing, all the cooking,”
But won’t you ever stop complaining?
“I need some rest, at mom’s I want a week.”
Then take the kids and there go play bezique.

     (Husband speaks to wife)
“Today I’ve got a meeting I’ll work late;”
Again today, I’ll have to masturbate.
“And early I must go, much traffic.”
That’s good, I’ll have the morn to frolic.
“Tomorrow, I’ll be off for Cuba”
I know, and so will be Regina.
“Why don’t you with the kids enjoy the winter?”
I’ll be with George, they with a babysitter.


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1 posted 2008-12-23 02:54 AM


I'm glad you joined PiP too.  This poem is really funny - not sure if it will have to be moved, but it is funny.

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Marc-Andre
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2 posted 2008-12-23 03:48 AM


Thanks, Alison. I'm glad you have enjoyed it. Did you see my ode to poetic forms? ( /pip/Forum106/HTML/003024.html ) I think you would like it A merry Christmas to you! Mark
Marc-Andre
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3 posted 2009-01-07 01:52 PM


Here's another one:

“Oh how your eyes I fancy,”
I know, I am so sexy
“And how I like your smile;”
With which I men beguile
“I’ll take you for a drink”
I think you need a shrink
“tomorrow after work”
You know? You’re such an irk
“If that’s alright with you”
I might enjoy a brew
“Where would you like to meet?”
The mosque for Alawite.

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4 posted 2009-01-07 09:37 PM


Thanks for joining in, Marc!  Yes, remember that this is a family forum so keep that in mind or you'll have to beat it somewhere else!

You did the assignment well although I have a problem with near-rhymes. Not saying they are not good to use because many people do, but it takes away from the quality.

exhaustion/protection   cooking/complaining  traffic/frolic   Cuba/Regina  winter/babysitter

I appreciate the effort, though!

Marc-Andre
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5 posted 2009-01-07 11:28 PM


Thanks Balladeer, I'll post one with solid rhymes soon Mark
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