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Balladeer

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0 posted 2008-07-11 01:09 AM

This is one of  my  own little mind exercises and I pass it on to you...

Here's an evil little puzzle
Guzzle down a beer or  two.
You can do it if you try hard
Bards, I offer this to you.

Make the last word and the first rhyme
Time to get your brains in gear.
Clearly it is time to think some
Dummies  will not make it here.

Who will tackle this endeavor?
Never has it been done here.
We're the  first so let's get going
Showing that old nasty 'deer!

Simple little poem with a rhyme scheme of  a-b-c-b, the  only difference being that the  last  word of each line must rhyme with the  first word or syllable of the next line. Sounds  easy enough..

Try it

nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2008-07-11 06:24 AM

Why Not Try?

I spend each morning thinking back,
Lacking what I use to know.
So there I go where once I tried
Denied the happiness, although...

Bestow upon me just a smile.
Beguile me with a touch of word.
Heard before, but always needing
Seeding thoughts, this heart be spurred.

Absurd to think tomorrow's finds
Unwinds the twist behind mind's eye.
Deny me not, this summer's morn
Born this day, a first reply...
M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (07-11-2008 07:17 AM).]

Dr.Moose1
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2 posted 2008-07-11 07:01 AM

nakd,
Excellent job. You may want to check that last line before the "nasty old 'deer" gets here. Perhaps " born this day, a first reply " ?
Doc

nakdthoughts
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3 posted 2008-07-11 07:20 AM

Thank you Doc..I don't know how I missed that one...guess I wasn't in the groove yet this morning.

Besides, it did bring me my first reply

Thanks again,
M

OLIAS
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4 posted 2008-07-11 10:56 AM

Here's my attempt:

Testing ! Testing , one two three,
we like a challenge Ballad-d’,
see how fun filled it can be,
free to rhyme in harmony.
He did it wrong … first words only,
Gee! I’m sorry …. So tetchy..
Esprit de corps is not easy..
Teasing words that end in ‘e’.

OLIAS.

Balladeer

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5 posted 2008-07-12 12:38 PM

Maureen, that is terrific! Nicely done

OLIAS...great start with the first four lines but then it fell apart. Try again...?

Alison

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6 posted 2008-07-15 11:13 AM

Maureen,

I love your poem.

A

I'll be back with my attempt.

Prasad Nataraj
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7 posted 2008-07-23 08:49 AM

Hi Sir,

Here's my attempt.

The Great Puppeteer

This world is a stage,
Age is just another phase,
Ways and roles we play,
Clay puppets we are in plays.

Someone is a great Dad,
Sad someone is an orphan son,
One is a caring mother,
Other is friend like none.

Strings tied to our soul,
Role and goal set for us,
Thus, we play our part,
Depart when he wants us.

Prasad.N

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

Balladeer

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8 posted 2008-07-23 06:26 PM

A Balladeer tip of the hat to you, Prasad! Not only did you follow the guidelines, you have excellent thoughts behind these lines that gives the reader food for thought.

My thanks to you for joining in...

Prasad Nataraj
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9 posted 2008-07-24 04:04 AM

Dear Sir, please accept my thanks too, for coming up with such an interesting challenge, I really enjoyed working on this one. Many thanks to you and I am glad you liked my attempt. Prasad

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

chopsticks
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10 posted 2008-07-26 09:01 AM

Balladeer, I am amazed at what I have learned from you; but don’t pat yourself on the back to hard, I am quite dumb to stat with,

I thought I had found a flaw in your little mind exercises; but after reading the rules carefully, I found that I was the one that was flawed.

You are still the great communicator.

Alison

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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

11 posted 2008-07-26 01:09 PM

Dear Darlin' 'Dear,

My effort is posted here:
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Thank you,
A

Balladeer

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12 posted 2008-07-26 10:29 PM

Nothing dumb about you, chopsticks. We all have a lot to learn about a lot of different things. Just the fact you can learn makes you intelligent. It's a pleasure communicating with you

Alison, on my way.....

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