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A Loon(er) Night

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

0 posted 2008-06-26 10:25 PM

If I had a stick
to carry
I wouldn’t walk softly.

...

Baby birds nest;
their mother fusses and flits
when I appear.

...

Did we say to heck
with spell check?
It just takes a sec.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

1 posted 2008-06-27 11:16 AM

It would break my heart
if you forgot
to share yourself with me.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2008-06-27 09:35 PM

Hugging you...

Whether it fits the guidelines or not, I certainly appreciate the way your mind works!

Balladeer

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

3 posted 2008-06-27 10:29 PM

Love the second one, Alison

Last line of the first one has a syllable too many.

You're doing good, though

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

4 posted 2008-06-28 02:34 AM

I tried to say "wouldn't" really fast as if it had one syllable. It was the five shot latte coursing through my veins. I was speeding. Thank you for deciding to hang out with those of us who are participating. I appreciate you, Mr. Balladeer.

Sunshine, darling - hugs and kisses flying your way.

Balladeer

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

5 posted 2008-06-28 11:43 AM

Those lattes are also responsible for the word "squeet", instead of let's go eat. Just say NO to Starbucks while writing poetry

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