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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA 
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(Since editing this post doesn't bump it to the top, you'll have to go out of your way to open it. If you do, you'll see how slowly and methodically I really do write... Just call me a tortoise....  All righty then... Next??? If you haven't gotten your quatrain completed as yet - GET A MOVE ON!!! (not mentioning any names but you can see who they are from reading the Syllabus thread). STEP TWO - Setting up the poem in format... The format of a villanelle is a very specific repetition of two lines, with two other alternating rhymed lines incorporated as well. The format is: a1-b-a2/a-b-a1/a-b-a2/a-b-a1/a-b-a2/a-b-a1-a2 We have five tercets (three-line stanzas)with a-b-a rhyme schemes and a final quatrain with an a-b-a-a scheme. The last two lines of your quatrain, a1 and a2 will be plugged in as indicated - Here's mine... With passion born of words alone, ...................unprecedented care When love from inside out has grown. In spirit lustful hearts declare With passion born of words alone, No greater love - No small affair When love from inside out has grown. Clandestine musings freely share With passion born of words alone, With bated breath a bond has sown Intrinsic trust beyond compare When love from inside out has grown. True intimacy's surely known ~ Enjoining once unseemly pair With passion born of words alone, When love from inside out has grown. Now - The rest isn't as simple as you might think - You ALWAYS have to consider how you're developing your THEME. Then, you have to maintain your METER - and come up with some good lines that will do both, and still rhyme as I've indicated. Oh - and the end result has to sound like it was just the simplest thing you've ever written.... You may find yourself wanting to make some fundamental changes at this point - That's normal. For instance, the first two lines of the last quatrain may just fit better in another stanza before you're through. Another important point is whether or not to repeat your lines exactly. There are two schools of thought on this point. The more traditional (Balladeer's) concept is that you must always repeat verbatim. The more liberal viewpoint is that some minor alterations in line content can be allowed for the enhancement of the theme development. I'll post my "Friends or Lovers" below. This one was written with a more liberal format. My work in progress will be verbatim (so Balladeer doesn't yell at me again), however... OK, guys - Let's see how you do with the rest - Dig in!!... FRIENDS or LOVERS Throughout our lives we're ever dreaming of The day we'll find that perfect sweet caress. How shall we know when friendship's really love? A quest for raptured hearts the conduit of Life's bask in yearning throngs of WistfulNess. Forever seems our lifelong dreams are of The hope we may imbue our hearts thereof With exultation, but we shan't unless We recognize when friendship's turned to love. When all emotions fit like hand in glove It may just be - 'Tis serendipitous. Those things in life we're ever dreaming of As rhapsody's sung on the wing of dove And, one to each, our promise we profess How do we know this friendship's really love? Whence we have placed our faith in Hands above Each ray of sun bestows SagaciousNess No longer things we're only dreaming of We'll surely know when friendship's one with love. [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 10-07-1999).] [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 10-10-1999).] |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
oh my gosh.....did I say I wanted in on this??? GULP oh boy. RobertB ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Ummm...teechur...ummm....I havta go pee! C'ni be scused???? |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Why is it that I always have a "Robert" and a "Christopher" in my class? Don't interrupt me when I'm giving directions. I hate to have to repeat myself!! |
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