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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2004-05-06 02:40 PM



Hey, fellow students, how about writing another poem in the form of any poet you choose (must be well known and one who writes in form). You choose the poem and post it, or just the title, on your thread along with your own original poem in the same rhyme scheme and meter? Anybody interested?
If so, let us know.
Let's give the teacher a little break here

Liz

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Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2004-05-06 02:51 PM


As an example, here is a poem I wrote a while ago in the rhythms of Poe, "The Raven", to be exact. You don't have to read the whole thing to get the idea, but here it is anyway. Next time, I'll pick a short poem. Anybody want to try? The Frost ones were beautiful!

Of Knights and Castles  

There’s a tale that’s still is living, horror that is unforgiving
Through the royal vein still sieving, words that flow in infamy
Centuries past two youthful squires, boyhood friends in woods and mires
Lit by heritage,  the fire’s burning torch of chivalry
Both with dreams to light the high and gallant torch of chivalry
Sons of purest royalty

In the days of kings and castles, knightly crest with golden tassels
Two with blood as blue as summer skies were training duteously
One of family,, different lineage, but the two would joust and scrimmage
To portray the manly image that would set their spirits free
Catching maiden’s eye with images that set their spirits free
Training skills of chivalry

Visions set upon the power, and the heights of fortress tower
To be dubbed a knight to serve, protecting king and family
Roses bearing thorn and thistle, wielding swords that slice and whistle
Through the morning air like missiles, targeted for knighthood’s knee
Handsome cousins, thorny roses, bowing on a squire’s knee
Dubbed a knight of royalty

Each a tough and youthful squire, now in honored knight‘s attire
Armor, gauntlets, tunics bearing crest of royal family
Both were skilled in equal measure, both were deemed the castle’s treasure
Two young knights prepared to fight and battle any enemy
Bearing crests of heritage passed down through genealogy
Knighthood was their destiny

But their friendship greatly withered, jealousy had slowly slithered
From two hearts in love with one, sweet gem of principality
By her beauty they were taken, friendship’s honor was forsaken
Inner beauty was mistaken for her skin of ivory
Soft and dainty were her lips and gentle face of ivory
Tender face of royalty

Both, her flirting eyes were sharing, both would challenge any daring
Knight to joust for her attentions,  and display their chivalry
How her fluttering eyes pretended, loving gestures so intended
Only to fulfill unmended illness born in infancy
Madness in a mind fermenting since the days of infancy
Behind a face of ivory

Waiting for a burning ember, something she would long remember
Burning ember that would flare into a hero’s ecstasy
Then one day from out a tavern, came the rumors of a cavern
Where there lived a fuming dragon, who emerged from deepest sea
Born on land and lurking in the cold, cold waters of the sea
Blowing fires of tyranny
From the mountains highest ridges, past the gorge and long foot bridges
Furious eyes had spotted this young maiden walking endlessly
Holding two bright golden crosses, and illusion’s albatrosses
Pacing back and forth across the castle’s highest balcony
Soft and tender ivory feet that tread her chamber balcony
Madness pacing to be free

Dragon monster, breath of fire, eyes fixed on his one desire
To attack the pacing maiden, lunatic of secrecy
Spotted by the knights on duty, to protect the charming beauty
And collect a handsome booty, and the hand of royalty
Both adorned with every weapon, and their crests of dignity
Crests of family royalty

For a moment was forgotten, brewing hatred, ties grown rotten
Now they fought together, these two cousin knights of chivalry
Dragon fires flared and threatened, monster roaring blared and deafened
But his might was greatly lessened by their ingenuity
Two young knights who killed a dragon with their fine agility
Blue blood bulging furiously

Both were then rewarded greatly, feast of celebration stately
Honoring the heroes, who now for her ivory hand compete
Honored knight of her own choosing, one the winning, one the losing
Both invited to attend the musing princess, at her feet
Laughing to herself at these two fools, the cream of the elite
Flaunting arrogant conceit

On a night of clashing lightening, in her darkened chamber, frightening
Shadows danced upon the walls where she was locked with iron key
There she begged their knightly presence, to endow to one her essence
One she would select to be the husband wed in royalty
Blue with blue mixed in a marriage bound  by solid royalty
There alone the royal three

As they knelt before her Highness, ivory face pretending shyness
Hands behind her back were holding sharpened weapon rigidly
Not a moment hesitated, two bowed heads decapitated
Never lingered, never waited, just a slice deliberately
Two beheaded knights, who haunt the castle halls eternally
Knights with spirits running free

Tales of horror, ghostly vision, live within this royal prison
Chamber tainted with blue blood and essence of insanity
Two young boys grew up together, rode the trails in any weather
Knew the cliffs and fields of heather, wore the crest of family
Handsome knights, two cousins bearing sacred crests of dignity
Dubbed by sword’s insanity

~ by Elizabeth Santos  July 26, 2003

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
2 posted 2004-05-06 03:12 PM


On second thought, what about the idea of doing the above, a shorter poem of course, but making the theme be of Mother's Day or Memorial Day. What do you think?
Anybody in?

Liz

Sunshine
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3 posted 2004-05-06 04:30 PM


Geez Louise you're a tougher teacher than Miss Nan....

I'm game for anything, Liz...

just let me find my head.

wings of the moon
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4 posted 2004-05-08 05:44 AM


very tough...how about copying any poem's format with a mother's day theme? then it will greatly differ...


Nan
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5 posted 2004-05-08 07:05 AM


You rock, Lady Santos...

All righty then - searching for a favorite here...

You're on, Liz - anybody else want to help in future months?  This Sylvan stuff is pretty time consuming...

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
6 posted 2004-05-08 09:34 AM


Sounds good, wings, i'm so glad you are in this. I've got to get busy myself, and think about which poem I will be rhythmically imitating, but not until MOnday.
Looking forward to reading some more of your beautiful poetry, everyone.

Happy Mothers Day!

Liz

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
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Indianapolis, IN
7 posted 2004-06-02 04:03 PM


hey, i would really like to join in on this one, but it won't let me start a thread, what am i to do?

Sunshine
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8 posted 2004-06-02 04:45 PM


YoungBlood...Nan will have to give you permission to join.  I'm sure she'll get to that, soon!
Nan
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9 posted 2004-06-03 09:54 PM


Sooner is as Sooner does...
Dr.Moose1
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10 posted 2004-06-05 09:55 AM


Liz,
Don't know where my heads been at lately. I thought I posted one already, but, nope ( must be some cyber dog ate my homework! )
If I turn one in late, can I still get credit?
Doc

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
11 posted 2004-06-07 09:44 PM


I just returned from vacation and I appologize for my lack of response, but I didn't even use a computer while I was gone, (that was a first) and so I will catch up on the forum within the next fer days. I see we have one diligent student in the class, and I will read hers tomorrow. DR Moose, it's never too late, my friend.
Liz

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