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Endlessecho
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0 posted 2004-04-12 02:04 PM



I feel the wind against my face
And smile at its tickling trace.
As it caresses rosy cheeks
I dance on without care or grace.

It is as though for me it seeks,
with longing, on through days and weeks
to play upon my sandy locks
and lift them like a goddess Greekā€™s.

The dust twirls round my feet like flocks
of loyal lambs in fluffy frocks.
Upon my dress it jumps to cling.
I care not for my white new socks.  

I smell the rain this day will bring.
It smells of all the joys of Spring.
And all I long to do is sing!  
And all I long to do is sing!


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Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
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1 posted 2004-04-13 12:29 PM


This poem just sings the rhythms of zFrosy.
and look how lovely it is!
Oh, you have brough me a smile through all thsi April rain with this beauty.
You have proven the theory to be correct---
about imitating a beautiful poem in its poetic form and VOILA!
You have created a perfect spring poem
THank you!

Endlessecho
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2 posted 2004-04-13 09:38 AM


Thank you so much, Liz!!  I think this was a wonderful idea for an assignment.  Perfect for April and the start of Spring.

I LOVE THE SMELL OF RAIN! :-D

Sunshine
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3 posted 2004-04-13 02:03 PM


You make this appear so effortless.  
Before Liz gets out her wet noodle,
I shall have to put my gray matter
to a frosty poem...

Not A Poet
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since 1999-11-03
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4 posted 2004-04-19 12:00 PM


Just lovely it is.

Dr.Moose1
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5 posted 2004-04-19 06:27 PM


Endlessecho,
There's some great imagery here, kinda makes me want to go run barefoot through a mud puddle. Splish Splash.
Doc

Denise
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6 posted 2004-04-30 11:12 PM


Beautifully done, Endlessecho! Lovely!
Nan
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7 posted 2004-05-02 08:49 AM


Singing in the rain, indeed - I'm there... Spring is sprung and you've helped it along.  Thanks for sharing your "frost rhythm - kinda" with us - I'll be out playing in the puddles with Doc...
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