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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Most glorious of gizmos with your captivating bells and lights, our minds to mesmerize. Your beckoning whistles of promise are heard, though better ignored by those who know you well. Did wish my attention were drawn otherwise and from your attraction could then be inured! In palaces lit with the glimmer of hope you preside to create diversion through glitz galore. As soldiers of fortune whose ranks never thin ensnaring the luckless, from wealth to divide. Your clamor is constant that we feed you more creating illusion that "suckers" can win. You sing us your siren song, luring us onto the reef, there to strip treasure from our broken holds. Your trickery's worthy of Fagan and ilk, for all of your glamour you're still but a thief, that plays to our weakness, the glitter of gold, with licence to pillage, and plunder, and bilk! Your coffers are vast, feeding corporate gluttony well. An empire built on the concept of greed. You siphon off all that the idle will spend, at leisure, I too have come under your spell. Your one armed embrace seems to fulfill some need. No matter I know that most likely will end... up badly. The slots aren't without dividends. |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Well-written, Doc! The lure of casinos is well described and the danger of ruin adds to the excitement. Enjoyed! Shenachie |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Bridget, Thanks. I'm still not too sure about the form, I think this fits the criteria with the exception of the tag line, but, that seemed necessary to complete the poem. Doc |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
Well-done.. as always. This was a neat take on this "casinode" - I liked. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
 Three of a kind it is... jackpot!!... |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Endlessecho, The first one I tried was more of a joke, as I said. This was a little more complex, per Brians' advice. I tend to stick with the basic forms ( and "maybe" bend the rules a bit) yet, I'm always willing to try something different. Thanks for the R&R. Doc Nan, Thanks, wasn't sure about this at all. I thought it might fit the criteria, but, was uncertain about the extra lines. If you say "Jackpot" though, I'll just wait for the check ( I assume it's in the mail!) Doc |
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